pls don't read this u won't have context

pov: u decided to click on this catastrophe and now ur confused

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Peter

"'Peter doesn't seem to like you much.'

'Listen, that sounds like a him problem,' Nia replied casually."

Chapter 1-2: You already know this man, assuming you've read the Narnia books, but I love how the author is giving us a chance to see what the siblings are like once they've defeated the White Witch. Here, Peter needs to learn how to put trust in those he's not familiar with and stop making immediate judgements, and I'm curious to see how he'll grow out of his critical attitude.

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Susan

"Guys, shut up."

"Sorry, Susan."

Queen. Literally and figuratively. She's basically everyone's older sister and will put you in your place when called for.

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Lucy

A whole cinnamon roll. I'm not sure if she'll be a major part in the upcoming chapters, but she's cute.

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Edmund

I don't think this man had a line in these two chapters, but since he was presumably trash talking Nia and Enne, I think he needs some character development as well.

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THE DYNAMICS

Nia and Enne (platonic soulmates bye)

Nia and Enne are the best duo and you can't tell me otherwise. This may also be a slightly biased review, but whatever.
I like how they are constantly exchanging witty dialogue and have the worst conversations simultaneously. Something I would be interested in seeing is what happens when their one brain cell doesn't work together and they're at a crossroads.

Peter and Nia

Okay, so if it wasn't clear from the description, we have an enemies to lovers trope coming on, and I'm a huge sucker for those. I'm excited to see Peter and Nia get over their loathing for one another. The Pride and Prejudice vibes are immaculate.

Enne and Edmund

*gags* I'm sorry...what?

Everyone Else

Susan and Nia would honestly be a cool friendship, and Enne and Lucy plotting shenanigans would be fun. As a group, the girls are superior bye. Edmund and Peter seem to  have a good sibling relationship. Again, I'll need more details before I say anything else.

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THE WORLDBUILDING

Although this takes place in Narnia, my only concern is the lack of descriptions for the environments. Including at least brief descriptions of the settings would be awesome. The only real critique I have is engaging all five senses for the readers.

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DIVERSITY/REPRESENTATION

Nia and Enne.
That's it.
*crickets chirp*

Our backs hurt from carrying this whole novel.

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MISCELLANEOUS

- punctuation could be improved BUT I kind of like how it adds to the chaos of the story?? so this is the author's call. also we don't care too much about punctuation in this fandom
- my favourite thing about this series is that it's highly entertaining, and if you need a good laugh, it's perfect
- the bits regarding the prophecy and Aslan's advice to Peter was my favourite part because of the foreshadowing of character development
- I need more chapters
- also, this book is free on Wattpad and the author unfortunately doesn't get paid for her hard work