Suprise's

14 Part Story 11.2K Reads 106 Votes
MusicLoverSWS By MusicLoverSWS Updated 2 years ago
[My Life is Full Of Drama, Without Being the Soulmate of the Vampire Prince]Gabriella or most call her Bree, goes to her brothers Wrestling match, and bumps into the hottest guy she has ever seen! Why is he so interested in her though? oh and did I mention he's not from her school, and has no idea how she will ever see him again well besides tomorrow at the wrestling match, but what will happen the next day?....
writerbird writerbird 4 years ago
hey good job.  watch out for mistakes and a few I's when it should have him's or me's. story was pretty good tho it was weird how a guy is shirtless and just prancing a girl around a school. O.O lol. but good so far. 
louisa-s louisa-s 4 years ago
nice long title there :) good story btw (: its well written and a good beginning (:
Armiella Armiella 4 years ago
It seems like protagonist girls have a habit of literally running into hot guys at the beginning of stories here a lot. 
IBreakHearts IBreakHearts 4 years ago
wow, that's a long title lol anyway this is really good! nice details, good hook, and it written nicely *voted* :)
tianajade tianajade 4 years ago
I think it's an OK beginning. Maybe slow it down a bit, it was really fast paced. A few grammar errors here and there, such as fullstops, commas and capital letters. Some more description would be good to add also. Good start though, keep writing.
JMMbookworm JMMbookworm 4 years ago
Wow, this story is cool!!! But (there's  always a but. Hehe) I think that you should make it a little slow on the part of them liking each other. But if your story plot or whatever your story  plan wants it to be like that, then it's ok. But I defenetly love it!! UPLOAD SOON!! ;P