Oh thx!! :) Ohhhhhhhh..... I see. Well I don't think a story with such a good story line would ever be bad!
Nice work! Just try not to start every sentence with "she" as it breaks up the fluency a little. But this was a great start! Very sad.
very nice...i've been looking for a book like this, i can relate your story to my real life. i cried when i read it
Wow, that was so dramatic! I really liked the suspense! It was great and so touching too. :) Voted.
you have wonderful grammar and your story is paragraphed wonderfully its nice to see!
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