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Yours Forever

Yours Forever

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Shireen By _Intellectual_Badass Completed

Short poem.

- - Oct 22, 2011
I think it's great!  Especially for a first try!  I'm terrible at giving advice.  About the best I can say is that I believe rhyme and rhythm add something very powerful and beautiful to a poem.  I've finally relented concerning free verse.  Some of it has very fine thoughts contained.
_Intellectual_Badass _Intellectual_Badass Oct 22, 2011
@deb_mikaru Thanks so much for the advice :) Yes, this was my first attempt. I love poetry, but I don't really think I'm much of a poet. 
                              @Lynfalling Thank you so much! :) Doesn't matter if you skimmed, the fact that someone is actually reading this is pretty awesome all on its own :P
deb_mikaru deb_mikaru Oct 16, 2011
is it your first attempt in poetry?.. great job! just write and write more!.. poetry is not just about words.. but about passion and heart. :)
RushabhKhatri RushabhKhatri Jun 12, 2010
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                              This is called great work...!
                              Heart of Love  is rebirth in this poem...!
_Intellectual_Badass _Intellectual_Badass Jun 09, 2010
For a second I was like, "whaaa? facebook, what is she talking about ?" 
                              That just shows how out of it I am ... I put it up and an hour later, I forget. Baaah.
                              Thanks Niccyboo =)  <-- that's my nickname for you :P