I think it's great! Especially for a first try! I'm terrible at giving advice. About the best I can say is that I believe rhyme and rhythm add something very powerful and beautiful to a poem. I've finally relented concerning free verse. Some of it has very fine thoughts contained.
@deb_mikaru Thanks so much for the advice :) Yes, this was my first attempt. I love poetry, but I don't really think I'm much of a poet.
@Lynfalling Thank you so much! :) Doesn't matter if you skimmed, the fact that someone is actually reading this is pretty awesome all on its own :P
is it your first attempt in poetry?.. great job! just write and write more!.. poetry is not just about words.. but about passion and heart. :)
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This is called great work...!
Heart of Love is rebirth in this poem...!
For a second I was like, "whaaa? facebook, what is she talking about ?"
That just shows how out of it I am ... I put it up and an hour later, I forget. Baaah.
Thanks Niccyboo =) <-- that's my nickname for you :P