A lost cause

A lost cause

5.6K Reads 72 Votes 20 Part Story
sydney By XXjojoeXX Completed

After being abandoned at a concert, Mary moves in with the singers Jayy and Kyle. Love is in the air, but who can she be with?

XXjojoeXX XXjojoeXX Jun 06, 2011
@JESSaBELLIE i agree. the bathroom scene did carry out a little too much. I'm glad that you liked it though because this was my first story here on watty. Thanks so much for voting and becoming a fan! :D
                              
Jessabellx Jessabellx Jun 06, 2011
I love your descriptions! You described everything so well. The only thing I can suggest is maaaaaaaybe  take a few tiny bits out when she's in the bathroom geting ready ? It drags on just a teeny bit. But that's just a suggestion :P 
                              It's awesome how it is anyway :D 
                              Voted and fanned!!!
JLVice JLVice Apr 30, 2011
i love it so far! its awesome! lol. I prolly wont stop reading it until im done. im a big book worm and when i start to read something i like i cant stop.
aprilbrookshire aprilbrookshire Apr 01, 2011
I think this is actually well written, I'll have to read more when I get the time
luvleegurl luvleegurl Mar 24, 2011
Yah I see that now... i have like 2 more parts to read i think...
XXjojoeXX XXjojoeXX Mar 16, 2011
@XXjojoeXXAlthough the characters are not implied as the actuall band members