Extraordinary

Extraordinary

469 Reads 24 Votes 3 Part Story
flamedancer23 By flamedancer23 Updated Mar 14, 2012

There are people with abilities others don't have. Jane was your average 15 year old girl until the world of The Extraordinary changed her life forever. Now everyone wants her gifts when they found out how powerful she was. Everyday is now a risk for death, and Jane has no control over her fate....

  • aunt
  • belt
  • chapter
  • coat
  • crimson
  • extraordinary
  • eyes
  • fantasy
  • fire
  • firedancer23
  • firewhisperer
  • flamedancer23
  • green
  • jacket
  • jane
  • man
  • murder
  • new
  • note
  • orleans
  • powers
  • stranger
  • sunglasses
  • trench
  • virginia
fruitus fruitus Jul 03, 2012
It's well written and there are no serious mistakes. The preface was amazing and well paced, with just the right amount of suspence and action. I really enjoyed it so far :)
whiplock whiplock Mar 14, 2012
Don't shoot him! Jeez... Haha, I'm sucked in! Good job, even though this is only a preface!
MoonlessOutcast MoonlessOutcast Mar 13, 2012
This is very good. I like it. I didn't see any  spelling/grammer mistakes execpt for what @CallieKensi pointed out. Keep up the great work. :D One more thing...upload soon please :D
TheBoredDevil TheBoredDevil Mar 13, 2012
Interesting. I haven't seen this kind of fantasy in a while.
TroutandLofty TroutandLofty Mar 13, 2012
nice, my only issue is you need to seperate speech, each person speaking gets a line to themselves :) that's my only issue, good beginning :)