Chapter Three The Traning Under The Stars [wait wait wait...chapter three was 'the battle 4 the caln'. This is chapter four.]
OMGOSH GUkys im so sorry but SOMEONE glares at rainy days FLAMED ME AND I GOT REALLY HURT. OKKAY IF you dont LIKE thestor y you dont have to readit u know.
[Someone flamed you? Does that mean they threw you into a fire? I sure hope so. Hey flamer, invite me next time!]
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Chapter Three The Traning Under The Stars [You just said that]
Shadowclan run from the camp. StarPaw smiled. Shed one! [And Shed two] Noone cod hurt her family now .
StarPaw!" said FireStar. "Its time we train!" I want to show you how to fight!"
"Ok." Sad StarPaw happl;y. "but yo just saw I culd fight, write?" [wow, she can write? Maybe she should help the author with this]
"Well, ya." said FireStar. "But I wnted tol see if that was all you new."
"Ok." They went to the frost togather and the other cats cleaned jp the bodies.[what bodies?]
"Ok StarPaw" said Firestar one they got their. "We'll start with how to dog." [Yes, because you're so bad at being a cat, you have to be a dog]
"Cmon thas too easy!" yelled StarPaw. Shed just beat BlackStar she was ready for anything! [No, you beat Blackstar's cowardly clone]
"ok Ok" mewled FiresTar, lets learn how to claw an oponit. [because thats sooo advanced]
"Ya." Yowled Starkit. She jumped at FireStar not Giving hiM time to attakc. "She hit his side he didn't move he was to surprise.d she clawed him and he started bledding. "wow StarPaw" he said ".Your doing awesome." "Really?" gaped StarPaw. She didn't think she was doing that god [and now shes a god?] was she relly special like the porphesy meowed? [stahp]
"Yes StarPaw." Snarled Firestar. "I couldnteven get away in fast enough. Only scourg was did that before.,"
"OMGOSH REALLY?" asked StarPaw. [yes]
Scourg?1? THE SCOURG? She dherad so muchj about him he was really evil and killed alot of cats. [I can't even tell what shes trying to say here]
"I'M LIKE SCOURG? "I didnt mean it like that" FirePaw sad fastly. "I ment you wer a good fighter. Its really cool." [oml. She spelled 'fighter' correctly. This is some kind of miracle]
At that minute he thought to himself 'Starpaws so kawaii look at her eys and her fur. [oh please no.]
"Oh ok thanks." They trained floor [because the floor needed to be trained] awhile later StarPaw beat FireStar 8 times once she let him win to make him fel bettar and b y the last one she was alittle tired.
"Hey FireStar can we hunt now." Said StarPaw. "im kinda hungry." [screw you, warrior code]
"Oh we'll if you want." Firestar was disappointed he and; starPaw had been having so much fun. So they went huntng, StarPaw messed up a couple times but FireStar said it was okaysince it was only her second time (she'd had her first time [*snicker snicker*]
when she was a littlekit and she and FireStar had snuck out together that's why he chose her as his apprentice_. [how was that allowed?]
Later that night StarPaw locked up at the stars. She and Firestar had'd so much fun this day. Theyd brung back enough food for the hole clan. [does the author spell 'looked' correctly once in this pitiful excuse for a book? ONCE?!]
Locking upn at the stars she turned to her best friend, JazzPaw, and said, "Do you think well ever be up there." [Yes, when you die, which will hopefully be very soon]
"Ya totally." Said JazzPaww. "I mean youll be l,eader and I'll be depudy one day well have too!" [Yes, you will be Starstar]
"Ya." Said StarPaw smiling she loved JazzPaw NOT IN THAT WAY U SICKOS!) they were best friends. [Idc, I ship it]
She loked up at the stars again and smiled and fell asleep wit the Starcaln voices whisper in her head. [would it kill you to use Autocorrect?]
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REVIEW R MY LIFE [wat]
(lol u like it Jazzy I mead you as kawai as I could( [again, who tf is Jazzy?]
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Deep breaths, Kendall, deep breaths