Book : Arranged To Love
Reviewer: dazzling_thorn
Author: thestoryworld1234
Cover
Cover is a good one. But I don't think that it will attract many readers. We do judge a book by it's cover and your cover isn't that appealing to the eyes. I'd suggest you to change it.
Title
Arranged To Love. A great title which is perfectly exhibiting the essence of your story. It is a common one though you could be more creative, but it's alright. Good effort.
Blurb
A nice blurb giving the readers an idea of what the story is about. Keep it up!
Plot
Arranged Marriage leading to love is quite a common concept that everyone tries to add somewhere in their stories. But in your book, Om being the ruthless businessman who rejects every other girl is a nice twist. Also, I loved that Om, despite being arrogant and rude, is not like those drooling boys. Moreover, I like the fact that Om and Gauri are completely opposite. I loved the family bond as well. Great efforts!
Progress of the Story (Storyline)
The progress of the story was really good. I liked the way you have shown that despite being arrogant, Om is still a family man. I read the starting chapters and they proved to be really progressive and nice. Good work!
Description
The story lacked a bit here. There were no proper descriptions. Like, if you are telling that, for example, the house was decorated. Simply writing, 'the house was decorated' will not give the readers any essence of imagination. Despite if you actually describe it fully as how the house was decorated, what was used, and how it looked like, would help the viewers to actually imagine it. And this is what makes a writer fabulous.
Grammar
The grammar wasn't really up to the mark. There were many punctuation errors as well. You really need to work in here so that you may be able to attract many more readers to your story and keep the existing ones hooked to it. Though you have a great plot and the progress of the story is smooth, your grammatical errors eventually cover up the potential of the book because readers do wish to read books with minimum errors. Try to work harder here!
Overall
A good story with a promising plot and progress. A little work on your grammar and descriptions as well as fascination would make you a great writer. Keep up the good work!
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