Erotic Book Club (E.B.C) 2019

Mean Girl (Feedback)

This is the first story I have read on here that seems to be about the author's own real life. As I said, this is not the type of story I would choose to read but her style has drawn me in. I want to learn about what made her the way she was and what those experiences led her life to be the way she lives it today. I will continue to read the story (11 chapters in or so at this point) as I said it has drawn me in. There were a few grammar errors but I saw that people had made note of them and perhaps the chapter length will need adjusting (which she said she is working on) as I read further but overall a very unique read for me and I am very interested to see how the story evolves.

~Mary

Let me start off by saying I like how you make the plot of this story is about a girl who has her own reason for becoming who she is now. A mean girl. I do believe that everyone has their own story, though this is just fiction, this fact is actually true. What's even sadder is that the things that she's going through right now is very common yet little ppl care about. I still think this is so unfair. Women, girls, *little girls* shouldn't be treated this way. I like how you narrate this story and you put a little 'the usual society's mentality about a girl getting harassed.' I'm a little bit sensitive about this topic and I think women are not at fault. I meant, not everything is women's fault. Men played an important role when it comes to this, too. This is so frustrating and unfair. Sorry for my bad English

I think this is really good. As you did yourself, this chapter is kinda short but very meaningful. I think she deserves to feel that way. She deserves to feel like killing the boy. I don't care if he's a 10-year-old or something, assault is assault, you should be ashamed of yourself. I also like how you try to focus on her rage in this chapter, by saying she's not ok with what he's doing, and she was trying to actually kill him...I felt that. Great job

Again, I personally think you did such amazing work when it comes to the story setting. I like how you make her go all crazy about wanting to kill her because if I were her I'd kill him too, no matter who he is. And I like how you make the older brother a compassionate man. He got some good moral values and he knows and realized that his little brother is an asshole kid who touches her against her will. I think this is very important bc no matter who he/she is to you, sometimes you need to realize that the ones you love did something wrong when they did it. He didn't even beat her up! And her friends shouldn't have just left her like that. No matter if they didn't like her or something, you should really help someone especially in this kind of situation. This is so horrible, really. But yeah, great job!!

~Emi