Reviewer: @SelenaJones_Vampires
Book: Between Worlds
Author: DESTINY5611
I loved this book! The prologue was so perfect and those aesthetics... *Chef's kiss*
I loved the description! I felt like I was there with Amy through everything. The description of Mr. Lee, Mrs. Janet, and Mr and Mrs. Farell let me imagine exactly how they looked. The book quickly reaches the plot at the end of the first chapter which I enjoyed. The endings of your chapters are legendary :)
Improvements: In the second chapter, it felt a little unnecessary for Mrs. Janet to randomly fall asleep. And I also don't get what you were trying to express by that so maybe you could make that more clear or change the idea that she falls asleep. I noticed some grammar errors such as when you wrote dialogue:
You write:
'I don't know' I mutter.
When you should write:
'I don't know,' I mutter.
You miss the comma usually. But otherwise, I really like it! I enjoyed reading it so much and can't wait for the next update!
Book title: 5/5
Cover: 4/5
Blurb: 5/5
Character development: 13/15
Plot and flow of story: 14/15
Creative and writing style: 8/15
vocabulary: 9/10
Grammar and spelling: 8/10
Interaction with readers: 5/5
Overall enjoyment: 8/10
Total score : 79/100
Thank you. Hope it helps.
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