THIS is what im talking about! a good adventure story! good job! this story is AMAZING! yaaay! x) haha awesome details! not too much, but not too little! x)
The snippet would ruin it for me, so I'll just move on x). I'll give you real feedback on the Prologue.
I love that you started it with a sneak peak because it makes me want to read more to find out what it going on :) great job!
nice!!! i'll keep reading it!!! I hope i could be like you someday when i'll grow up! Your writting is epic nice! :DD
Is really attention grabbing, and a great start. Description was good, great job overall. :)
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