A Girl's Best Friend- In Editing

A Girl's Best Friend- In Editing

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AJ By XxxAJxxX Completed

Rachel and her sister Jari live with a dad that doesn't take proper care of them and cares more for the dog then them. Russ, the dog, is a German Shepherd and is Rachel's dad's, John, baby. Rachel and Russ do not get along. At all. And Rachel discovers that she has feelings for a guy named Cam. Could they ever have a future together? Follow Rachel and Russ through their life and watch as feelings change and discover that their dad has a couple of dark secrets that are about to be revealed.

XxxAJxxX XxxAJxxX Jul 29, 2012
@RoyaleDecember haha nope(: He's hawtt(; and I can totally see him playing Terry
XxxAJxxX XxxAJxxX Sep 21, 2011
@Ecclipze Thanks for the advice! I went through and edited. I really needed to anyway but your comment prompted me too :) I hope that you enjoyed it!
EllenAlm EllenAlm Sep 15, 2011
Seems like a cute storyline.  However some of the words dont really seem to fit into place, and I notice in the dialogue, you say "it is" a lot.  Try changing it to "it's" as its more commonly used and the text flows better.
                              
                              Otherwise, great job!  :)
Chocolateroxz-DTV Chocolateroxz-DTV Apr 05, 2011
I <3 this it seems like dad likes Russ and the car more then her tho lol it's actually quite funny the way he's lik take good care of it and not the normal be safe or drive safe but it's kindda sad how he's nvr like lovy dovy type wit her as much as the dog but this story is awesome
XxxAJxxX XxxAJxxX Mar 06, 2011
Its not as bad as I have read before... It gets better and worse :)
Skiddles Skiddles Mar 06, 2011
This is kinda depressing..... But it's really well written!!