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He's all I've ever wanted

He's all I've ever wanted

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Danielle Mayes By daniellemayes626 Updated Jun 02, 2011

Rosealie Parker was an average girl who doesn't believe in love. But when she meets Jeremy Smith, everything will change. They've been friends for three years now and neither of them tells the other that they like them. So is their love be rejected by them acting foolish? Or will one finally have the courage to say that they can't live without them?

erica_drury erica_drury Mar 13, 2011
Much the same as my first comment. I know where ur headed and I think you've got a good story line but you need to revise the way your writing it. Nothing drastic just a little tweaking in ur sentences to help them flow better. It feels a little rushed too but in saying that im stop enjoying it. :)