Title: The Sould Mate Ball
Author: NessyStylinson
Rating: 9.3/10
Status: Work in Progress
Authors Description: Hey my name's Candy and I'm a werewolf. I'm a royal one..Wanna know what that means? Well It means that I can't have a normal mate so I need to finde one in THE SOUL MATE BALL. Most royal werewolves are dumb arrogant bitc*es. Well and there is me,I'm a what you call a bad girl and probably give a fu*k about the ball,mates and the royal stuff. But If you met my mom you would know why I'm standing in a pink fluffy dress. Heads up werewolves I'm comming to the dance....
My review of the story:
An original story of werewolf society and the classical story of the hate between vampires and werewolves.
My Thoughts:
If you read through your description I think you would realise there is so many errors which are very visible, so maybe you should concentrate on your sentences making sense instead of going rage in your description. I have to say i like your cover picture and it really did give me a good image of your book but the description was a little let down in terms of structure but the interested part in me really wanted to keep reading. So don't worry the description wasn't a total let down. Your first chapter was aactually really good despite the spelling mistakes and grammar errors but it did get me excited about the ball. My advice would be to extend the chapter a bit and explain her change in her resolve to go to the ball and more about the vampire attacks and how the werewolf society worked. I really liked, please continue :D
Pointers to Audience:
- An average story so far but has got potential. Check it out and show your support. Suits everyones likings :D and vote if you think its worth it!