Writing tips and tricks!

Make it flow

Every story needs a good flow to it. " But that's just for poetry Willow!" you might say, well no, it's not. Melodies apply to everything. Our voices, the sound of footsteps, everything and anything can be music once you think about it!

That's what's needed, a flow, it should feel like a river of sentences coming out of your tounge,Not choppy.

For example:

Joey: *Picks up sword*

Alex: What are you doing with that?

Joey: Using it. * Runs with sword*

Alex: No you don't! *Grabs sword*

Joey: Alex No! We are friends remember!??!

Alex: *Anger* Not anymore! This belongs to the king! *Stabs him*

Joey: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO *dies*

Alex: *Drops sword* What have I done? *gets on knees and cries*

Now lets pause. Did that flow? Not really. It seems more like a script to a movie or online roleplay than an actual story. I know, I know, people write like this, and I have nothing against them. I'm just saying it's plays out like your roleplaying with yourself. And some people find it cringeworthy, which could bring hate to your story. Let's try that again, shall we?

Joey picked up the sacred blade, looking left and right, up and down. Scanning every corner of the dark room. No one was in his way. It was a safe run, he darted towards the exit. That was until Alex stood in his way. Hands on her hips, scowling at him.

"What are you doing with that?" She asked, gritting her teeth together.

Joey had little time to respond. "Using it." he sputtered out. Almost sounding like gibberish.

He made a run for it, Alex who was behind him, gasped the handle of the sword drawing it from out of his backpack. She yelled at the top of her lungs. "No you don't!"

Joey stared at Alex in pure fear. She was surely angry. Holding the saber over him suspending a deadly swing. There was nothing he could do. Trapped in one single spot.

Joey pleaded for his life to be spared. "Alex No!" he cried. "We used to be friends! Remember?"

Her expression turned to a deep frown. "Not anymore!" Alex's voice blared, echoing through the corridors. "This sword belongs to the king!" She took a mighty swing of the sharp weapon, deep crimson splattered everywhere, as Joey took his final breath.

She realized what she had done. How she took her loyalty to the king too far. Filled with regret and somber, Alex dropped to the floor, the sword clanged against the stone floor. She cupped her hands over her face, hiding tears. "What have I done?" She wept.

Now, how does that sound? Better? Yes. It seems like an sample from an actual book! But I literally just typed that on the spot. Writing it like that gives more detail to the story. I'll list some things that we learned from the second example that we didn't know from the first.

+Alex is Female

+Where Joey was holding the sword

+ The setting, which was a corridor in a castle

+ How, exactly the characters were speaking. Sputtering, weeping, Yelling

+ Alex's emotions before and after killing Joey

See! It really helps!

Also, use correct grammar too. Unless you're writing a troll fic and want to make it as cringey as possible, then knock yourself out.

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There we go! should I keep doing these? Let me know!

Love, Sleepy.