My Immortal || The Worst FanFiction of History || [With Commentary.]

[Chapter Twenty-Three Through Twenty-Six] || With Written Commentary. ||

"No!" I screamed sexily. [Sexily..? You have way too many Adverbs.] Suddenly I locked up [You locked up. Did you have an entire lock jaw other than the jaw it's your entire body? Lock-body?] and stopped having the vision.

"Ebony Ebony aure you alright?" [I would be if you know how to spell.] asked Draco in a worried voice.

"Yeah yeah." I said sadly as I got up.

"Everyfing's [Everyfing... What the fuck.] all right Enoby." said Vampire all sensetive.

"No its not!" I shouted angrily. Tearz of blood went down my face. "OMFG what if I'm getting possessed like in Da Ring 2!" [The fuck. You cray-cray.]

"Its ok gurl." said B'loody Mary. "Maybe u should ask Proffesor Sinister about what the visions mean though."

"Ok bich." I said sadly and den we went. [Bich. You're such a bich.]

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Chapter 24.

AN: prepz stup flaming da story ur jus jelous so fuk u ok go 2 hel!11 raven fagz 4 di help! [Oh, yes. We are so jealous of your horrendous writing and horribly created plot-lines. Fagz. -Shakes head.- Introducing, my brain that melts when it has to read shit like this~!]

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Well we had Deviation next so I got to ask Proffessor Trevolry about the visions.

"Konnichiwa everybody come in." said Proffesor Sinister in Japanese. [No, it's Chinese. -Sarcasm.-] She smelled [Why.] at me with her gothic black lipstick. She's da coolest fucking teacher ever. She had long dead black hair with blood red tips and red eyes. (hr mom woz a vampire. She's also haf Japanese so she speaks it and everyfing. she n b'loody mry get along grate) [This disturbs me greatly. Why must you do this to your former viewers; and why am I doing this?] She's really young for a teacher. 2day she was wearing a black leather top with red lace and a long goffik black ripped dress. We went inside the black classroom with pastors of Emily the Strong. I raced my hand. [Did you rip it off and tell it to run away from you and that you'd catch it later? Puns are great.] I was wearing some black naie Polish with red pentagrams on it.

"What is it Ebony?" she asked. "Hey I love ur nail polish where'd u get it, Hot Topik?" [Topik. The fuck.]

"Yeah." I answered. All the preps who didn't know what HT [HT. 'You wanna go to HT with me later?' 'The fuck is HT?' 'Ah! You're a fucking prep!] was gave me weird looks. I gave them the middle finger. "Well I have to talk to you about some fings. [Fings have wings.] When do you want to due it?" [Your want is due.]

"Ho [Hoe?] about now?" she asked.

"OK." I said.

"OK class fucking dismissed every1." Proffesor Trevolry [Travolta?] said and she let every1 go. "Except for you Britney." she pointed at Britney and sum other preps. "Please do exorcize (geddit) [No; I don't 'geddit. Shut up.] 1 on page 3."

"OK I'm having lotz of visions." I said in a worried voice. I'm so worried is Draco gong [Draco is apparently a gong now. Okay.] 2 die.

Well she gave me a black cryptal [The fuck is a cryptal? Crystal?] ball to lock in. I looked at it.

"What do you c?" [D.] she asked.

"I said I see a black gothic skull and a pentagram." [Illuminati confirmed.]