Dandelion Awards 2020

📕POETRY RESULTS📕

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Judges - @dreamers_tale and iskozophrene

1. @fearlessvindex - Mga Tula ng Lalaking Tulala - HONORABLE MENTION
Creativity/Style and Originality - 28 - 27.66
Rhyme Scheme - 13 - 13.86
Clarity of imagery and language - 14 - 13.92
Tone and voice of the poem - 19 - 19.04
Coherence of form and structure - 18 - 18.84
Total Score - 92% - 93.32
OVERALL SCORE = 92.66%

FEEDBACK;
Ang iyong panimula ay agaw pansin at kahuma-humali. Ang mga tugma at taludtod ay tila isang bulaklak na nakaka-akit at nakabibighani. Ang bawat tulang nakasulat sa libro ay puno ng emosyon at mensaheng kapupulutan ng aral. Gayunpaman, may mga linya at salita akong nakita na hindi masyadong angkop o nararapat sa parirala o pangungusap. Tignang mabuti kung tama ang paggamit ng salitang galaw (action verbs), at gawing balanse ang iyong mga taludtod upang magkaroon ng maayos na daloy ang tula at hindi masyadong masalita. At panghuli, kung maaari'y gawing mas pulido ang bawat transisyon sa bawat stanza.
[Example Poem 4: Last stanza transition, from the first verse to the second verse, it feels like there's a missing link. It was okay but not the best. I suggest (hindi mo kailangang sundin); Panaho'y nagdaan at ako'y muling nagbalik, upang harapin ang panibagong umaga. Dahil ang pusong, minsa'y nasugatan ay unti-unting naghilom at bumangon sa pagkakadapa...]
Sa kabuuan, may angking ganda ang iyong tula, nawa'y ipagpatuloy ang iyong paglikha.

FEEDBACK;
Ang hinding-hindi ko makakalimutan sa entry na ito is ang lungkot na nakapaloob sa bawat tula. They all have this gloomy effect sa readers na parang the poems themselves want the readers to sympathize with them. As for the rhyming scheme, lahat naman ng tula a nakasulat dito ay may tugma. Pero may kaunting problema lang sa ibang linya kasi minsan, sa kagustuhan nating magkatugma ang bawat linya, naghahanap na lang tayo ng kahit anong salita basta magkatugma lang kahit medyo naa-out of place siya sa tula. But that's just a minor problem lang naman. Ang nagustuhan ko naman sa lahat is ang "Sampung Atras." Pinakanagustuhan ko doon is ang style of writing. Parang tula siya ng mga alaala. Kasi minsan reminiscing happy moments doesn't make you happy, but it breaks even more. Kaya nagustuhan ko ang "Sampung Atras." To sum it all, nakakatulala ang mga tula mo! Good job!

2. Alegny - Jar of Rhymes
Creativity/Style and Originality - 28 - 27.78
Rhyme Scheme - 13 - -14.04
Clarity of imagery and language - 13 - 13.92
Tone and voice of the poem - 18 - 18.84
Coherence of form and structure - 19 - 18.76
Total Score - 91% - 93.34%
OVERALL SCORE = 92.17%

FEEDBACK;
The poems have a great tone and voice that catches the emotion of the readers. I like how experimental each chapter had been. From rhymes to a narrative poem, it showcases the creativity of the writer. However, there were a lot of punctuations missing in verses or stanza. Please try to add period or comma in some lines so that readers will be able to pause or stop when reading. Another one is the transitions that were a hit or miss. Some lines needed a few editing due to either word structure or choice of words. Try to fix some of the word tenses as well to create a better flow. [Example: Poem 1, first verse, the second stanza; 'will' instead of 'would'] Nonetheless, the free verses (2nd and last poem), as well as the conclusion on the third poem, were well done. Keep it up.

FEEDBACK;
Sa entry na 'to, ang nag-mark talaga sa akin is ang "I Never Thought." Pasok na pasok siya sa spoken poetry. The repetitions are superb! Maganda rin ang rhymes na ginamit. Nagustuhan ko rin kung paano mo nilaro ang mga salita sa tulang ito. And most of all of course, ang feelings. Nandun ang feelings. Nagandahan rin ako sa "True Beauty." It's very short pero ang kaiklian nito ay hindi nagpa-down sa tula. Oo, maikli siya pero sapat na ang mga nakasulat para tapusin ang tula. After all, it's not the size that matters diba? It's the performance. At ang panapos na line, it's cool! Ang dalawang natitirang tula naman maganda naman sila pero para sa akin, may kaunting kulang lang. Let's just say na mayroong magandang elements ang nakapaloob sa "I Never Thought" at "True Beauty" na hindi ko nakita sa natitirang tula. Pero, sa overall, you're excellent!