I liked it. Really good descriptions, of the characters and the house. You use good vocabulary, which is nice to see. I'm definately reading more. Voted!
I relli lykd this storii... i thought it was emotional and sentimental which i luvd ;p Keep it up ;p
You are such an amazing writer. Your words flow so nicely- they just roll off the tongue. I was hooked from the first sentence. Keep writing!
this. is. amazingggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg!!!! why haven't you continued?? i can see this becoming very popular(:
Wow, this is drastically different than the old chapter 1. But I like this so I hope you upload when you can :)
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