Pure Heart (watty awards 2012 finalist!)

13 Part Story 28.2K Reads 736 Votes
Lhafez98 By Lhafez98 Updated 4 months ago
........"There! Now let me lo-" he stopped.  And when I turned to look at him he stared at me with eyes as wide as watermelons.  He saw it I thought.  He saw it. I felt my eyes water.  Why did I take of the jacket! Stupid! Stupid! Stupid! How could I forget! How!?

"I- I- I can explai-" I started but he grabbed my arm and we were flying out of the restaurant before I could even take a breath.

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Casey was a normal 16-year-old girl with many passions, but once a mysterious boy at school and a strange man start paying extra attention to her, she doesn't feel as safe as she once was. When she starts seeing haunting visions of death whenever she looks into either man's eyes, she's sure that this isn't going to end well.  Before Casey can figure out why this is all happening, she has to cope with losing everything she loves most.
EmileighJohnston EmileighJohnston 2 years ago
I will admit this isnt my type of story I usually read and the story started off a bit slow but other books that start off slow tned to end up fantastic and I feel the story progressing so I am going to continue, I am very curious as to what is going to play out
TheTommoSeries TheTommoSeries 2 years ago
Okay this is amazing, the editing has only helped it! I really like the choice of words you've included, the story flowed really well and It kept my interest which is a bonus!
victoria_nicolette victoria_nicolette 2 years ago
It's writtten very well and it's something readers can relate to (:
RAiiNcloud RAiiNcloud 2 years ago
I like her interaction wiht the cat :) It's very life like. I have that arguement everyday about spoiling the cat! ahah
And also her walk to school was a good one. 
You've given this story a real like.. real life take and it's refreshing. It seems more relatable than most
Chocolov3r Chocolov3r 2 years ago
Wow, 3 edits!! Worth it I say, cause I can't find any mistakes! :D Good luck in Watty Awards! I think you could win ^^
eightOclock eightOclock 2 years ago
I loved this chapter, specially the description of the vision she has. I hope you don't mind me saying this but the beginning was a bit boring. Otherwise, your writing is very impressive.
Voted! :)