jean687

Updated Blood in the night.

CherylDunn3

The moongoddess revenge - started off ok but not much details n feelings n stuff when writing about whats gappened.
          It all seems very fast paced like this happens then this then this all the time. Need to slow it slightly and put more context in to what is happening.
          It also seems to be in third person writing i.e. alpha gene lay thinking, alpha gene did this(while on his pov) not as i lay thinking or i went and did this.

Tink4me

I have to ask are you going to finish Savage,m/c story?
          This is the second story of yours I read with incomplete ending...what a disappointment 
          You are to talented...why write to leave a reader without an ending?