chiburple

Blood in the Fire is free to download on kindle today and tomorrow (May 8 - May 9).  Get your copy while you can :) 
          	
          	http://www.amazon.com/Blood-Timelaws-Trilogy-Marise-Ghorayeb-ebook/dp/B00W343PQW

chiburple

@JaneSilver16 
          
          I read your first chapter. Very original idea so well done! Made me think a little of inception with the concept. 
          
          I should warn you though that I'm on a bit of an anti-adverb crusade. May I suggest you remove the following words to make your sentances stronger: finally, vigorously, probably, miserably, logically, actually (in actually killed and in actually make it stop), seemingly, simply, suddenly. 
          
          And of course, I would love it if you would take a peek at "History of the Timelaws" if you haven't already :)