Taylor_0206

OMGGGGG I AM IN LOVE WITH YOUR LATEST OUTSIDERS STORY WITH JOHNNY IT IS THE BEST ONE I HAVE READ AND I CAN NOT WAIT FOR MKRE CHAPTERS ITS SO GOOD PLA KEEP WRITING WHENEVER YOU CAN OMGGGG ITS SO GOOD ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

kadeparade

Hey I don’t know if you will get this but I’m currently writing a story to and I was wondering if you could read it and give me feedback? Sorry if I sound like a brat 

kadeparade

Thanks for the Feedback
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kadeparade

Thank you so much
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Writergal1500

@Applejuice999 
            I checked out your story, and I like how you switch from Eclipse to Ash in POV's. One problem with this however is that near your early chapters like the meeting the characters and chapters one and two, you repeated what the other saw. If you are using POVS you want to try and make them different from one another, and if they are going to be witnessing the same things then make them see and feel things in a different way rather than repeating what Ash or Eclipse saw last. You also forgot a POV on chapter two. Other than that there are a few spelling and grammar errors, but I have those too because I don't edit my stories. I think your story is going to be really interesting, keep writing!
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