ToomyVara

Journey to Your Heart chapter 3 is out <3 Enjoy!

KeefeFosterLOL

Uh, I really need advice for my story. I figured if your so good maybe you can like teach me? (BTW you don't have to I just really need advice (Here's the link https://www.wattpad.com/993439065-chapter-1-the-matchmaking-scrolls)

ToomyVara

It is totally fine! One of the suggestions I would give you (if you don’t mind of course ) is adding little spaces between characters speaking! Like this- 
            “Hi there!” ??? Said
            
            “Hi! How are you?” Replied ?? back. 
            Another thing would be just trying to be more descriptive with you sentences! Other than that really really good! Thank you for reaching out! It means a lot 
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KeefeFosterLOL

(Sorry if its sophitz lol)
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