MikaelaXXVIII

03.01.2021

MarkLandis9

just a suggestion.  Finished your book and enjoyed it.  For english readers not used to it, the first thing to do in editing is make sure your pronouns use the correct gender.  I understand many languages esp in Philippines where I currently live have no gender so that is hard for most people to get right.  If you go through and just make sure when you are talking about the man use he/him etc and when the woman she/her etc.  Well thought out story and again it was enjoyable.  Hope this helps.  Not sure this is the best place to put this.  Could not find a private way to message so just delete after reading.  Thanks.

MikaelaXXVIII

@MarkLandis9 hi there! Thank you so much for letting me know all of these. There's no need to delete. Actually i appreciate it and i'm glad that you took to time to give a constructive feedback.
            
            First, i wrote this story and followed a present tense narration but while in the midfle of writing it i decided to make it in past tense. I had to edit the previous chapters and missed some parts  other than that, i changed the names of some characters in the middle of writing it. So i am not sure if i also missed some corrections, sometimes i also write too quickly and i haven't got the time to edit it. I know there are coutless typo errors and grammatical mistakes and i would love to correct it and improve it, and i probably would when i have time again! I'm so excited to write the sequel of this story. I'm so happy you liked it despite the flaws! Thanks a lot!!
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fharniee319

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MikaelaXXVIII

Hey guys! I'd like to thank everyone who read my story. I know a lot of you are silent readers but I want you to know that I'M SO GRATEFUL to have you. You keep the inspiration flowing. Just the thought of having someone read your work is already heartwarming. Oof that rhymes awiiit lol. But again, from the bottom of my heart, thank you ♡♡♡♡♡