DeandriaJosette

Just wanna take note , who would read my book if I posted it I just want to know

cookmechicken

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your story ironalpha2 I don't like it. 
          1) There's way too many grammatical errors, and your punctuation marks do not belong. stop it you use too much exclamation points one is enough to get your point across you don't need a thousand of them shits. 
          2) you can just stop writing that story altogether or make the chapters longer.  don't update just to update your chapter are way too short. and you take stuff from one chapter and put it in the next chapter to make your chapters longer no don't do that 
          3) Lord your story makes no sense I read all your ten chapters and honestly I didn't like them and quite frankly I don't really know what that story Is supposed to be about 
          4) I dunno when the characters are having a conversation use these("...") you started using them in the beginning but I dunno why you stopped 
          and lasty stop using so making fucking periods thats annoying 
          oh and you had Way too much author's note, you had them at the beginning and and at the end stop with those too or don't have way too many of them
          but I had your story in my library I'm removing it though just letting you know.  you can get an editor or  fix the mistakes yourself from what I told you but I dnt need to read any further.