DavidNadas

A Comet's Tale https://www.wattpad.com/story/201018542

Rasha007

Hi, thank you for the follow ❤️

Rasha007

Thank you :) I won't be mad if you don't stop
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DavidNadas

Nice writing and the intro makes it difficult to stop reading.
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Rasha007

And for listing Roommate ❤️ I hope you'll enjoy!
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Arveliot

Hi,
          
          Thanks for following. 
          
          Out of curiosity, did you read ‘All the Myths are True’ in Tevin-Krus #49? If so, what did you think? 
          
          (Mostly curious, because pulling that much lore was a bit of a departure for me)

Arveliot

Well, I feel like Wattpad’s at its best when we treat this place as a dojo for writers. So my opinion on critiques is that I ought to say thank you. 
            
            So thank you. I’m definitely seeing the potential of being over-descriptive. It helps, because I remember trying to use the descriptions to hint at the mythology. It being heavy-handed is a worthy observation. 
            
            Thanks again.
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DavidNadas

@Arveliot Yes, I did read it.  I liked the storyline but the writing seemed, to me, a little heavy with description and I agree with you, a departure from your style in  Dragon Chase, which by the way has a perfect hook in the opening sentence.  But heck, that's my point of view and it's hard for one writer to critique another because the moment we do, we are editing in our own style.
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