Cupcakegirlpower

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          	Chapter 12: Varian's POV
          	
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Cupcakegirlpower

Hey, guys. I know it's been awhile since I've updated Siblings of Corona. I probably won't for a while.  Mainly because I hate my old writing. I know it's probably not as terrible as I see it, but it makes it hard for me to continue the story because I keep cringing when trying to write... Which makes me not write at all. So I do I fix this? Simple! I'm going to rewrite the whole series, hopefully from start to finish! But I want some of your feed back sense you all are the ones reading it.
          
          1. Should I keep the song lyrics in it? Like have the characters sing or completely edit that out and just add the song as a side note? But then again, I feel like taking it out might make it lose some of its charm.
          
          2. Do you all prefer longer chapters? Or do you prefer shorter chapters that make it easier to set aside when you're tired of reading?
          
          3. Obviously, there will be some mild changes when rewriting it, especially some dialogue parts. But should I do more POVs? Like have more Lance and Eugene? And maybe even have chapters dedicated to each individual instead of switching around so often in the same chapter (beginners mistake of mine). Or should it solely be written only taking the POVs of Rapunzel, Varian and Cassandra?
          
          4. Is there any suggestions or changes you want to see better the improvement of the story and characters?

KingofGames17

@Cupcakegirlpower
            1. Personally I like the song lyrics it adds a fun aspect to the story.
            2. I also like the long chapters, it’s nice to be able to read a big chuck especially if chapters come out every few week or something it’s nice having a bigger chunk to read while waiting for the next release.
            3. I like the fact that you changed POVS it gives a really nice dynamic coming from characters different views. 
            4. No suggestions other than keep at it! This is my favorite series to read so as much as I’d love the series continued sooner I’m excited to hear that you haven’t given up on it!
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Brownie_Stars

@Cupcakegirlpower
            
            1. I believe that decision should be up to you. Some people like songfic while others don't. I just think that all depends on what is contained w/in the chapter as a whole, especially if the song takes away the main impact/purpose of a scene. But songs can also help embed the purpose of a specific scene, just like how it does in movies and TV shows. So, as a whole, I'd say to do the songs sparingly if it'll help convey a scene.
            
            2. Again, I believe it just depends what the chapter is supposed to contain. Long chapters are good, but they can't go on for too long cuz then it may make the reader less invested, or they'll leave after reading a bit of it, and then completely forget about finishing the chapter. (I make that mistake all the time, actually).
            
            3. While I would love more POVs of Eugene and Lance, the best would probably be to do what happens in Heroes of Olympus, where 1 chapter is the name of the character's POV, and then it swaps between the 3 of Rapunzel, Varian, and Cassandra (but I would say to do the same order, like 1-2-3 continously, and not do 1-3-1-2-2).
            
            4. I would only suggest more descriptive details of the world your characters live in, as well as their emotions a bit more. But don't forget that you should be having fun writing this. You don't haveta use any of the criticism here, as it is ultimately your decision. You write the story YOU want to write, not what others expect or desire. Hope these suggestions may help guide your writing, bestie! ♡♡♡♡ (If you'd like, of course)
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AMerope

@Cupcakegirlpower I know how you feel cringing at your old writing to the point of rewriting. 
            I don’t mind the songs. The main tip I have for you is being more descriptive and consistent on what’s happening and what we’re supposed to see in our minds. I remember reading several passages where I felt like I had no idea what was going on, especially in a climactic scene. 
            I wish you the best of luck on this, and it’s great to see how far you’ve come in writing.
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