CrypticEye303

A story I wrote in my free time, still can’t firmly decide on the story’s name. Maybe you guys can help?
          	
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          	Without any reason at all, Liana woke up on a flower bed. She could see the light above the place she’s currently in, but the exit is too far up for her to reach.
          	
          	She wasn’t at all fazed by it, and wasted no time to find another exit to this…cave
          	
          	Liana then had an odd feeling in her gut, as if there’s more to this place. Nevertheless, she went on.
          	
          	She then found a music box as she was walking through the cave, she turned the wind up key that was attached to the box multiple times.
          	
          	The music box played a soothing song, a song that Liana immediately recognised. Her mother sang it to her when she was scared.
          	
          	She had been a great parent to Liana, unlike her father. 
          	
          	But seeing her mother die from a rare disease that can’t be cured shattered a part of the little girl, making her the way she is now.
          	
          	Useless, Weak, Compassionless.
          	
          	When the song ended, Liana can only feel tears running down her face. Why does it have to happen?
          	
          	The little girl suddenly felt pain in her chest and coughed repeatedly while covering her mouth with her hand, but instead of normal cough, she saw various spots of blood on her hand along with a few white lilies.
          	
          	Liana felt sick at the sight of it, and fell down on the ground, unconscious.
          	
          	——————
          	
          	Yeah, that’s what I’ve got, thoughts?

CrypticEye303

A story I wrote in my free time, still can’t firmly decide on the story’s name. Maybe you guys can help?
          
          ——————
          
          Without any reason at all, Liana woke up on a flower bed. She could see the light above the place she’s currently in, but the exit is too far up for her to reach.
          
          She wasn’t at all fazed by it, and wasted no time to find another exit to this…cave
          
          Liana then had an odd feeling in her gut, as if there’s more to this place. Nevertheless, she went on.
          
          She then found a music box as she was walking through the cave, she turned the wind up key that was attached to the box multiple times.
          
          The music box played a soothing song, a song that Liana immediately recognised. Her mother sang it to her when she was scared.
          
          She had been a great parent to Liana, unlike her father. 
          
          But seeing her mother die from a rare disease that can’t be cured shattered a part of the little girl, making her the way she is now.
          
          Useless, Weak, Compassionless.
          
          When the song ended, Liana can only feel tears running down her face. Why does it have to happen?
          
          The little girl suddenly felt pain in her chest and coughed repeatedly while covering her mouth with her hand, but instead of normal cough, she saw various spots of blood on her hand along with a few white lilies.
          
          Liana felt sick at the sight of it, and fell down on the ground, unconscious.
          
          ——————
          
          Yeah, that’s what I’ve got, thoughts?

Jai624

Sorry @CrypticEye303 they got more helluva boss episode 

CrypticEye303

@Jai624 I gave up mid-way writing episode 3 part 2, and I apologize for that. But I won't be writing more than I already have, since I have only written it to test my writing style and to kill time.
            As for those that want to continue the path of writing the story, I must decline the request because I do need to go to school and be educated.
            But not all is lost. I might rewrite the entire story with different characters, and a different plot in the near future.
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