Califia

Hey Paige~~As a filmmaker and writer, "creating new worlds" as you say, is the ultimate challenge. Often we must push the limits of belief using language or digital imagery into the surreal. I don't do film but I strive often for what you're into--that ineffable place or situation. You may like this shot tale for it's boldness--though once you descend through the vocabulary, you might find it to be deliciously naughty. Let me know what you think.
          "The Magician's Tongue: A Parable"
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/17237746-the-magician%27s-tongue-a-parable
          
          ~~Califia

luminous_zen

Hi Thank you for voting for my story:)

Caby76

@mochielic I don have a question though.  It's hard to tell if this school is underground school. Like is the story in world like or own with a hidden society? Or is this a world of magic? I do like the camping adventure you start with. You might want to consider intergecting some world building in between the dialogue.
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luminous_zen

@mochielic really? Thanks once again :) I'm glad to hear that
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Caby76

@mochielic for sure keep going. I feel like you got a cool story in the making.
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