Hi everyone!
I'm currently working on this novel in English and I'd love to know how it reads to native speakers.
Just a quick note: I'm aiming for British English, so some spellings and expressions may differ from American English.
Does anything sound strange or unnatural? Are there any grammar mistakes, awkward phrases, or bits of dialogue that don't quite work?
Please be honest. I'd much rather know what needs fixing than assume everything is fine!
You don't have to read the whole chapter. Even if you only read a small excerpt, I'd still really appreciate your feedback.
Thanks for reading, and for any comments or suggestions.