Deep Conscience

Deep Conscience

169 Reads 10 Votes 1 Part Story
Dumplings By VensOh Completed

I feel the urge to write a poem concerning deep deep emotion a human might come across. That is called 'loneliness'. I myself felt the same way when i wrote this but is now free from its bondage. Hope you'll be inspired by the last words of this poem :))



Tell me what you think about it, I am no good yet I want to express this.
So here it goes....

OwainGlyn OwainGlyn Mar 09, 2013
Considering that English is not your first language, this is a well crafted piece.
PrettyBrokenKilljoy PrettyBrokenKilljoy Jan 12, 2013
Beautiful poem. I think it was very inspiring, I like the message behind it and it was just amazing :)
                              Great job, I voted because it's really good :)
effie002 effie002 Dec 13, 2012
back...
                              i like the twist at the end 
                              the second last stanza was also moving
                              keep at it
VensOh VensOh Dec 11, 2012
yay thanks anyway :))
                              secondly English is not my native language so pardon me :))
                              and thanks for those critics i consider advice :D
teenagekidrauhl teenagekidrauhl Dec 06, 2012
Ang ganda pows nito. hahaha. Lalim ng mga words :") pero niceee . :) Oh binasa ko ito ah . Hahahahaha