A young boy gets the chance to save the world, Please read
hmm u have quite the imagination :)
its really good.. call me later so i can show you how to separate the chapters so its not all in one part..
i agree with lovestrykes, and it seemed kinda rushed, but still good writing don't get me wrong, but I had no idea who these characters were, and everything. unless that was the point, but i like plot and your a good writer(:
Every piece of dialogue deserves its own special paragraph. Please remember that. :)