Originality: 10/10
Spelling and Grammar: 10/10
Character Development: 10/10
Overall Quality: 10/10
Opinion:
Very, very original! Yes, dragons aren't an original concept, but the Bermuda Triangle dragon? Completely different! I really like the concept so far!
Spelling and grammar, as expected from this author, awesome. Character development, also expected, is awesome. I enjoy how you used low vocabulary and you made it present tense rather than past tense. As you mentioned in your author's note, I agree, that by doing that, it feels like we're actually in a mind of a 12-year-old.
I enjoyed how short the chapters were. I know that most reviewers or others harp on the fact that longer chapters, but not too long, is better. I agree with them to a certain extent. This story you made would be really good for children 10-14 to read. It is a good light story for them, and with shorter chapters, it will keep their attention longer (imo).
And this is coming from a 19-year-old who has the attention span of a 5-year-old. I need short chapters. It makes me eager to move to the next one and keep my interest. (It could possibly be a psychological thing.)
Anyway, that is my opinion. Amazing story!
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