What you do NOT do

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by Cloudyapplesauce

by Cloudyapplesauce

Okay so I'm going to put examples of bad ocs and why (fair use, not copyright)

Take note on the "unstoppable" form
That is a bad sign- and you immediately know it's a Mary Sue/Gary Sue.
Why to not make your oc unstoppable:
You can but if you'd like to have a action rp,or fighting rp it gets annoying and it makes the oc impossible to beat which makes it super unfair for the other person

how does you hair just magically turn different colors,Which is very illogical.

The ears
Oh lord- don't get me started on the ears.Now don't get me wrong ears can be incorporated very well, like a werewolf.But not just ears and a tale like maybe having wolf legs.

What is she????Make sure they are ONE species (demon/angel and etc. are exceptional if incorporated well)
In her "unstoppable" form she seems to be a doll/wolf????

The mouth bleeding- LORD- UNLESS they are DYING!- OR DEAD- ITS EGDY AND OVERUSED

The "unstoppable form" outfit could be incorporated well, but the other one...not so much-

Red eyes....
OH LORD- MARY SuEEEE!-
JfC- NeXt

Outfit:
The pink- it's bright and does not match her hair.And it's to short, she looks like a stripper and I don't think her creepypasta is supposed to be a Stripper.The shirt, again she looks like a stripper to much boobage!-

Her hair:
It's EyE BLEeDInG!
Why to not make it eye bleeding:
Most creepypastas have a dark pallet, but not to dark which makes it edgy and cringy

Her relationship:
Jeff is overrated, his story is illogical- it's JuSt- WhYyyyy?
Ima have to get my friend, Lee on this (link on the post down farther)
"JEFF:
Starting up with him for /obvious/ reasons. He's not to be sexualized. He's not to be your boyfriend.
He could be a killing partner if you play your cards right in a roleplay, but nothing more. Either that, either your OC is his next victim."

Lives with slenderman:

Okay ima get my friends say in this

Here is her post on amino:
http://aminoapps.com/p/zbfcjk

The part that's important;
"Slenderman
He's a manipulative monster. Not a person with a mansion hidden in the woods, who has adopted many cute serial killers."

*InHaLe*
The EDgE-
Oki ima get a source of the word edgy

"something or someone trying too hard to be cool, almost to a point where it's cringe worthy."
Said ゴジラ from urban dictionary.

You shouldn't make your oc with just a black and red pallet, maybe throw some earth tones in there.

Crying blood:
It's overrated and over used.Its illogical to do it.

Mouth slits:
Now this could go well if you don't make it along with a edgy colour scheme.

Rant over for now.

Feel free to send ocs for criticism!

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