"I laugh with them, throwing food , I grab an apple that had been air, I took a bite out of it."
This is an example of what I have seen; I have never seen this sentence in a story on here. Ever.
But yeah this is what I see, and it bugs meeeee. I can barely understand the sentences sometimes because they are run-ons. More semicolons, periods, and commas with ands please. I mean we're all human, contrary to anyone's belief, so we will make mistakes. But it's not good when I have to go over a sentence ten or twelve times so I can make sense of it.
How I could rewrite my example (this is just one of the many ways):
"I laughed with them watching as they threw food at each other. I grabbed an apple from the air and took a bite out of it."
This makes sense, to me at least.
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Mistakes I see in Wattpad Books
Non-FictionI am just saying, "These are the mistakes I see most often." Don't get peeved; I am titled to say what bugs me. Now you can read what mistakes I see. If you want to.
