Starry BOOK AWARDS 2021 FOR FILIPINO

Results for Science Fiction

Ranking:

🥐FIRST:
(Vector 1213 Escaping Hell)
HerHiddenLife

🍚Book Cover:
5 Uniqueness: 4
5 Eye-catching: 4
10 Overall: 8.5%
Comment: The cover is fine.

🍚Blurb:
10 Uniqueness: 9
10 Heart-catching: 9
20 Overall: 19%
Comment: Revenge is a very cliché idea, but since you added the abnormal girl vector--which you described optimist, it makes the story interesting.

🍚Book Title
5 Catchy: 3
5 Design: 5
10 Overall: 8.5%
Comment: The title is a bit long. "Escaping hell" is also an overused words.

🍚Plot:
20 Twist: 18
20 Impact: 20
10 Uniqueness: 8
50 Overall: 48%
Comment: Vector 1213

I honestly enjoy the story. Kabanata 3 pa lang ito and you left me hanging there--cliff hanger. Doon sa part na nasa elevator at tinanong sila kung gusto na ba nila makita ang Vector. Tapos bigla mong in-end ang chapter. That's thrilling. Lalo na hate ni Aiden ang Vectors.

For negatives, the writing execution is not that well. Lots of showing than telling. Lack of coherence on how you connect the statements. And some character's lines are a bit awkward. Masyado ring stereotype ang ginamit na character which is not commendable. It's okay to use stereotype pero they looked very predictable kasi. Kung ma-e-execute ng maayos, it will be fine. Also poor execution of emotion. Iyong flashback execution ay kulang pa sa impact.

But still, if we see the story itself, I found it fun on how Aiden interact with Doctor Shaw. Doctor Zoe's personality is also interesting though I found awkward at first. You mentioned that she looks strict at first, pero hindi ko naramdaman iyon. But to Bridgette, I suggest to make it bit natural.

Also, your terminologies such as Vault, Vector and Armageddon is cool. I love it lalo na iyong "Vault," the most protected place from Vectors. Ang ganda.

🍚Grammar and Spelling:
10 Accurate: 9%

Overall: 93%

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🥐SECOND:
(Sailor: Chronicles of the Myth)
JEICUB

🍚Book Cover:
5 Uniqueness: 5
5 Eye-catching: 10
10 Overall: 9%
Comment: A character clad with the modern hoodie, holding a glowing bow and arrow, standing on a dystopian settings--how these variables conflicted to each others arouses my reader's spark. Supported by the blurb and the title--it doesn't seemed focused with war and action--resulting to lead more into curiousity.

🍚Blurb:
10 Uniqueness: 9
10 Heart-catching: 9
20 Overall: 16%
Comment: The blurb is fine. It already gave the details kung ano ang pangunahing iikot sa story. Just avoid the redundancy like "Tungkol." And I think, you can still improve a little the sentence construction here but the concept itself is already fine.

🍚Book Title:
5 Catchy: 3
5 Design: 5
10 Overall: 7.5%
Comment: Medyo cliché nga lang ang mga words. Honestly, sa blurb ako mas na-hook.

🍚Plot:
20 Twist: 20
20 Impact: 20
10 Uniqueness: 10
Overall: 50%

Comment: I love it--honestly. The story is full of morals and worth to read. The character development is great. I love how innocent is Matrix. Two POVs but you manage to separate their tone. It's like the author was so empathetic that he managed to write two people with different perspectives.

The only bothers me is the poor execution of the high tech settings. Iit was discussed late. Though the strength of it is it should be perceived by the characters as natural, but still, we, readers should also feel it. Then, kung ilang libong taon na si Matrix sa mundo, you should include some background about his trials and errors at the past. Adapted na rin dapat niya ang technology and used to this world. Mukha kasing mga 1-3 years pa lang siya bumalik sa mundo.

🍚Grammar and Spelling:
10 Accurate: 9%
Comment: Okay naman but instead of dash, you use hyphen. Hyphen is joiners while dash is seperators.
Wrong: Narinig ang tunig ng bell-hudyat na magsisimula na ang klase.
Correct: Narinig ang tunig ng bell--hudyat na magsisimula na ang klase.

Overall: 91.5%

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🥐THIRD:
(Beauty is the New Beast)
RixelBalt

🍚Book Cover:
5 Uniqueness: 4
5 Eye-catching: 4
10 Overall: 8.5%
The book cover is fine.

🍚Blurb:
10 Uniqueness: 5
10 Heart-catching: 5
20 Overall: 15%
Comment: The concept about "beauty" may be new, but the story line isn't.

🍚Book Title:
5 Catchy: 5
5 Design: 5
10 Overall: 10
Comment: It good on how you played the words which described exactly the concept of the story.

🍚Plot:
20 Twist: 17
20 Impact: 15
10 Uniqueness: 7
50 Overall: 43%
Comment: The narration is well written, but lacks impact sa story line. Also lack of emotion. You made the readers perceive that her first Auntie is the only person she could rely to, then meron pa palang isa. Hindi ko rin dama iyong sampal sa prologue at pagtalon niya mula sa kaniyang kuwarto para makatakas. Unless may acquaired supernatural ability siya, you should make some clues para maging acceptable siya while reading the present scenarios.

This is the struggle when you start the story na may namatay na mahalaga sa buhay. Kasi hindi pa namin kilala iyong mga characters so hindi kami maka-build ng sympathy. Then the main character's bad-ass personality is like walang pinag-kaiba ang attitude niya sa pamilya niya. Like, kung naging perfect din sana siya, ay pagpapatuloy niya rin kasamaan ng magulang niya. So makukulangan ng simpatya ang reader sa kaniya. While, if you write an innocent girl, that's very cliche. So my suggestion is, try to play it more. Add some non-stereotype variables in terms of personalities, stakes, regrets, and etc.

🍚Grammar and Spelling:
10 Accurate: 10%
Comment: Flawless. The author looks really experienced in terms of writing technicalities.

Overall: 86.5%

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Note: Congratulations for winning! Since tatlo lang ang participants ay walang talo. Congratulations! Sa judges din dito sa genre na 'to, thank you!!! Hindi ko nalang iniba 'yung feedback mo since agree ako dun, nagbigay lang ako ng scores then kinuha ko nalang ang average. Thank you judge!!! So much! Participants, congrats for winning!!

💎Science Fiction Genre on Starry Book Awards 2021 is now signing off...