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'A Twist Of Fate' by coffeeandbookaholic

Sorry for the wait coffeeandbookaholic. I've had a long, tough week. Lot of work, a migraine attack, broken furniture and I have to call the vet tomorrow as well since one of my pet rats has fallen ill.

Thank you for being so patient with me. Here is your review, finally.

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The cover

I'm not a big fan of it to be honest. It feels very much like a generic starter cover. Which is not bad but it's not great either.

The title

At first, I thought this would be a fanfiction but I was pleasantly surprised to find out that it is actually a romance/teen fiction story. It's not at all a bad title either. At least it isn't a generic title like 'The Bad Boy & Me' (You do not want to know how many times I've seen the words bad boy appear in titles if the story is set during school years)

I still feel like I've seen similar titles in your genre though.

The description

At least there isn't any unnecessary detail in your description. That makes me very glad.

The order of your description doesn't feel optimal though. You start off great with an interesting line 'They were never supposed to cross paths but fate had other plans' and you introduce Sara in a great way. I'm missing a similar good introduction for Xavier though.

Maybe after the line 'She has everything planned out and is ready to lead life her way' you can start with a little bit about Xavier 'Xavier Andrews was the school's heartthrob...' and follow it up with the 'However, fate could twist you around and around if you aren't careful...'

Of course, that is just a suggestion. In the end it is your story and you should be happy with your work.

The story

So, something I immediately noticed is that you often use 'she says' or 'I say' after a line that someone has said. It's good that you want to make clear who says what but it can feel a bit repetitive. You could try switching to 'she chuckles' 'she smiles' or 'I wonder out loud' in order to make it feel less repetitive.

Also, I notice that most times you use present tense like 'say' or 'says' but you sometimes use past tense 'said' during the same conversation as well. It's not a big issue but it's something I noticed.

You do however have a writing style that is easy to read and I do appreciate that very much.

The story is nice. Maybe a bit predictable like him being the one she spilled her coffee over in chapter 2 or them becoming partners on a project in chapter 6 but still enjoyable to read.

Your characters are good and I especially enjoyed Brian as a character.

My final judgement

It's a nice enjoyable story. It might be a bit cliche but that is often the case with romance so I don't mind it.

You have a few small grammar errors but those are easily fixed when taking the time to edit them. It also helps that the grammar mistakes aren't obstructive when reading the story so it's not the end of the world.

The story has some good potential so I can't wait to see how it will continue.