Forever Silenced

YuffieProductio...
9 months ago

Thanks for the comment! :D I'm glad that's how you pictured Caleb, too. 

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YuffieProductio...
9 months ago

Thanks for the comment! :D CALEB! <3
OH CRAP I forgot about Ryo... *facepalm* I'll go back and add some stuff about him in that chapter. He was napping during it.

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YuffieProductio...
9 months ago

Thanks so much for the comment! :D I'm glad you liked that chapter so much. 

I overdid the Jara smothering. >_< I was a hopeless romantic in my teenage days..... *cough* 

Caleb is coming back soon (within a few chapters, if I remember correctly) ! :D CALEB TO THE RESCUEEEE. 

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goldenaspect
9 months ago

Ah, I know what you mean - I hate it when that happens.
Best of luck then. 

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goldenaspect
9 months ago

Yep, there were much better. I love your background by the way.
Do you already have the second chapter written up? If you do, how many chapters have you written? 
If you do have it, please do upload. (:

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goldenaspect
9 months ago

You're welcome. (:
Oh, I hate when that happens. I thought Wattpad tackled that problem, but obviously they haven't. 
Upload soon! 

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xIrishDaydreame...
9 months ago

Katrina I must thank you so much for the wonderful critique. I needed the help with grammar. Heck, I could write pages but my grammar is rather poor. I shall defiantly sift through those adverbs etc. As for the overdoing it, I totally understand where your coming from. Believe or not, that is how the story came into my head, so I guess I can blame it for the way the phrases are. (Teachers always killed me for the same flowery phrases- hence why I say it to others in critiques) Thanks so much for all your help. It was great swapping with you  :D

p.s. I totally recognize your name from inkpop but I can't think what I read from you. It's bugging me.

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goldenaspect
9 months ago

Hello.
Lawl, no, I hadn't forgotten. I was quite busy the past three days - sorry that I took so long, but it's done now. 

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YuffieProductio...
10 months ago

DX I'm so sorry. I know this is frustrating to all of you as well. This time, I promise I won't post the story until I'm completely done writing it. That's a Yuffie promise. 

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YuffieProductio...
10 months ago

Thank you so much! That really helps. 

I completely see what you mean about the plot kinda failling after the hospital thing. When I wrote the story, I didn't even have a plot in mind. I just wrote whatever came into my head, and I still don't think there's a plot. I definitely need to work on that, and I'll put more focus on the missions. Yeah, I absolutely did switch the focus from missions to romance, and it only gets worse in the next set of chapters. Ahh, I will definitely work on that. 

Kara is dense. All my MC's are way too dense. I don't know why I keep doing that..... That is definitely something I need to work on. 

I totally understand where you're coming from with Rose and Ethan. I'll work on making them a more prominent presence in the story and giving them a real point. 

xD Don't feel terrible! This is exactly what I wanted. I'm very grateful you took the time!

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