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TITLE OF THE STORY : IN A FLASH OF A MOMENT AUTHOR :Powey06 REVIEWED BY : SAKSHAM ( SAKSHAMCHATURVEDI )
TITLE/COVER:
The cover is very appropriate and well-made. About the title, I'd suggest to keep it something which hints the readers a bit about the story, or sounds attractive. Marks- 6/10
BLURB :
Make it longer, Don't straight away give scenes from the book itself. The first paragraph should be describing what the book really is about. Then give a suspense building sort of scene. It should hook the reader. Marks- 5/10
STORYLINE :
Readers won't read the book for just plain romance, there are many in that case. You should always try to give suspence. Romance should always have a sub-genre in my opinion. Also Chloe catching up with Noah was quite quick change of plot, it could have been more dramatic. Marks- 7/10
VOCABULARY :
Excellent use of vocabulary. I love how you use words to the right extent so good job for that.
GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION :
I didn't found a single mistake. I don't know whether you work is edited or you are skillful.
CHARACTERS/DIALOGUES:
The use of dialogue was good. Just a suggestion, Aaron should have been more focused on. Noah seemed to be a bit too excited. There should have been some suspense about their personalities. Without suspense, a story becomes boring.
DESCRIPTIONS :
The description of the characters were quite less, You didn't tell what the characters look like and that can made it difficult to imagine them. The description of the scenes were fine, just keep in mind to describe the attire and appearance of the main characters.
PACE :
As I mentioned earlier, Chloe and Noah were a bit hurried. Aaron's point of view could have made a good suspence-full chapter. Try to slow down a bit.
FLOW OF THE STORY :
The flow of the story was quite good. I just didn't like that scene with Chloe's mother and if not something major planned in the future, Chloe's mom scene was a complete waste in the eyes of the readers. Her brother could have given more attention.
OVERALL ENJOYMENT :
It wasn't very much reader hooking. One big plot hole that I noticed was Chloe was supposed to go to her friends for a sleepover, but she went to her house instead. I would also suggest you to include cliffhangers that will make your readers flipping through your story pages.
POINTS :
Title : 6/10 Blurb : 5/10 Storyline : 7/10 Vocabulary : 10/10 Grammar/Punctuation : 10/10 Characters/Dialogues : 7/10 Description : 7/10 Pace : 7/10 Flow of the story : 8/10 Overall enjoyment - 5/10 Total : 72/100
