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I don't do read for reads. I do a critique once a week.

Status: Open!
(I make slow critiques, but they cover everything that I spot as a possible mistake 99% all in chapter one.)

Ask me first before doing the critique, message me. I'll be seriously annoyed otherwise. I'll still appreciate it of course, it's better if I know it's coming for peats sake.

Strengths are: First person pov and Deep third I can help you improve it even more. Can teach you how to use both 'showing' and 'telling' that you won't learn from other cridics on this site. And much more.

Weak with: Commas - I can spot the easy ones. I have an editor and the Grammerly app, so just ignore any mistakes unless there's more then two per chapter. Then go ahead and help. <3 Tks!

Do fix grammar, spelling, commas and paragraph spacing before asking for a critique from me. So, we can focus on the more advanced issues. I know weird right? It's easier to spot other peps mistakes then your own. :P

An honest comment on my book Soul Tear as payment, or a critique on any chapter except chapter one. The comment needs to be at least two paragraphs long (about 25 words.) Saying stuff like *I love it!*. doesn't count. Be honest, if you dislike or hate it say so, I won't take it personally. I hope for positive comments, but who doesn't? lol.

Each chapter you read will get you one critique in one chapter of your book. You can keep doing this as long as you like or I become burnt out.

Don't delete the critique right away keep it for awhile, (like a few weeks) especially if it's an in book comment. They can come in handy for reference.
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Am attacking chapter 26 now! Rarrr you fall in line chapter! You will have story structure and like it! (lol)
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