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Yellow_Star By Yellow_Star Updated Mar 31, 2013

A window has opened inside of Joaquin Knight's mind. He begins to see images of people and events belonging to a different era.  Unable to get any answers from his doctor, neighbors, family and friends, Joaquin starts to look within. What he finds, challenges all logic and reason.

Lely2011 Lely2011 Feb 10, 2013
Post the Next part I wanna know what's gonna happened next really interesting keep it up :-)
kidwiththesharpie kidwiththesharpie Sep 27, 2011
There are so many stories on this website that just disregard every rule in writting. Yours does not and it makes me happy. I loved it. I need you to post the next part like now right now :)
epsilonnaught epsilonnaught Sep 27, 2011
A very intriguing beginning. I like your writing style. However, you might want to watch your sentence lengths. Some of them are long and clunky.
                              
                              Other than that, well done!
ESYLuc ESYLuc Sep 27, 2011
You may want to shorten your spacing. 
                              I like the idea. Pretty Inception-like 
                              - Emile
MichaelLomas MichaelLomas Sep 27, 2011
Not bad.  Being cheated on does suck. It definitley raises the curiosity level.  Good stuff.  It kind of reminds me of an older movie called "Blink"  Keep going.
xoshannonxo27 xoshannonxo27 Sep 27, 2011
i really like the suspense! i feel bad for him cause his boyfriend cheated on him ): upload soon!