Starlight (On Hold)

Starlight (On Hold)

281 Reads 9 Votes 5 Part Story
Shadowslynx96 By Shadowslynx96 Updated May 27, 2013

In the midst of Order, there is always Chaos. In times of Peace, there is always Violence. They compensate one another, giving each other meaning. In a time where Human Civilization prospers across the galaxy, a catastrophe manifested silently, unknown to the rest of the universe until it was almost too late. They came like an earthquake, striking unexpectedly, leaving a path of devastation in their wake. Can they be stopped? Is this the end of the Human Civilization? Journey through a world full of wonders and dangers; experience it with you own eyes, your own heart, your own mind.

AmberDalcourt AmberDalcourt Jan 19, 2015
Not too shabby. However, I feel like I'm on the surface of the action; I'm being told what's happening - but I'm not experiencing it as a reader. You have a strong premise. Keep it up.
captain22 captain22 Oct 06, 2014
Deff like the last half a lot and it's got a nice vibe to it.
captain22 captain22 Oct 06, 2014
I like it, not enough info that I feel I know what's going on but just enough that I want to know what's going on! Good blend.