Shipwrecked on Red-Indian Land

Shipwrecked on Red-Indian Land

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terminaytress By terminaytress Updated Aug 29

After being shipwrecked on a remote jungle Island in the middle of God knows where, Rizpah is rescued by a barbarian who stashes her away in his cave. Will she ever be able to tame this cave-man and change his savage ways? How will she go back to civilization when she has no means of travel? 


Hur cannot believe his eyes when he sees a golden-haired angel in the jungle close to his hide-out. But his surprise quickly turns to suspicion and mistrust when he remembers the white-skinned people who invaded his home and took his brother and some of his other tribesmen away across the ocean. Now they are back and are building settlements on his land. And they had the same hair color as this wench! Will Hur ever let go of the past and embrace what is to come?


Join these two polar opposites as they try to find common ground so they can live together in peace.

i love this time period, just the way you write the scenery and characterize it perfectly
LeahGraifer LeahGraifer Aug 08, 2014
Just a friendly tip you should make sure to show the difference between the characters thoughts and the narrator 
                              I'm super excited to read more though
yellowbraid yellowbraid Jan 11, 2014
Some advice I can give is, make sure to give the point of view from different characters.
terminaytress terminaytress Jan 18, 2013
@DebbieOsomo totally right. thanks. and thanks for the cool advice. so..... will you be my editor. hey. dont forget to fan, and vote. ciao