Take On Of Us √ Taehyung ff by sumi_rra
Total Marks ~ 100 Marks for following the rules – 5/5 Marks for reader interaction- 5/5 Marks for book cover: 4/5 The cover looks plain and so I would suggest that a new cover can attract more readers. Marks for book description: 5/5 The description was short but it gave perfect idea about the story. The description is written in a creative way making the reader attracted the story. Marks for book title: 5/5 The book title is appropriate for the story. Can’t argue with it. Marks for social message: 3/5 The story gives the message that never leave your true love or the persons who cares for you due to your selfish greed because life always doesn't give a second chance. Marks for book plot: 8/10 The plots were well formed satisfying the readers with the story. Marks for grammar and vocabulary: 19/20 I would love to say the grammar and vocabulary are used perfectly in the story. No words were repetitive and the words describe the situation and emotions well. But I still could not give you full marks cause maybe my poor eye sight missed some typos and misspelling.
Marks for plot twist: 8/10 The journey through the story was smooth without any twist. And it was a good journey without getting bored, the story is full of emotions and can make readers remember about their first love and the struggles they have made to save it. Marks for character development: 8/10 Author has made her characters uniquely which will surely please and pleased many readers including me. Marks for creativity and way of writing: 7/10 The writing was simple and good making the readers understand the story easily. Marks for my opinion on the book: 8/10 Seriously this story touched me a lot. It makes me remember about the feelings of first love. I was able to feel the happiness, pain, sorrow, humour radiated by the characters in this story. The story is a emotional love story with perfect sense of humour at the beginning which can make readers lure around the story like bee. Total Marks~ 85/100 Review: Overall the story pleased me a lot. But I would suggest a new cover is needed for the book to attract more readers as first impression matters.
JUDGE: TAENILLAKOOK
one last hug by Zandra996
reader interaction 4rules 5social message 2 *3 plot 4 cover 5 description 4title 5grammar vocabulary 9 *15 character emotions 5 *6 twist attraction 3 *4 creativity 4 *6opinion 4mark 54 *65
review..it would be better if author write more about the situation people are in..and adding more details.
HR: The book could undergo a complete revision, not for grammar but for writing format, i read the whole thing but...it just kind of turns a little plain, all the letters and everything is good but there is this void...Jungkook ignores her and at the end he suddenly changes...he already very well knew that she'd die!? The characters can be made a little more realistic, also, do give scenary explanations, i know the book is a short story, but adding some author's POV descriptions would be better.
Saudade by Bugnoo
rules 5 reader interaction 5 cover 3 *2 description 4 title 5 social message 2 *3 plot 5 *7 grammar vocabulary 16 *18 twist attraction 3 *7 emotions 7 *8 creativity 6 *7 opinion 6 mark 65 *75
reviews..adding details will make it even better..the story was beautiful.
HR: when i first saw the cover, the first thought that came to my mind was that it's a book about dark Jimin mafia au or something but there wasn't any intimidating and cruel Jimin so even if the cover looks amazing, it doesn't glorify the book in anyway, it would be great if author changes the cover. *whispers* the cover type of 'you are i, iam you' would look great instead! Also, the title is a great one!
BTS stories and oneshots by Rachel_RelonJin
rules 5reader interaction 5description 4title 5cover 5social message 1*3 plot 3 *7 grammar vocabulary 13 *16 twist attraction 4 *6 emotions character 3 *6 creativity 2 *6 opinion 4total mark 53 *71
review...it was funny to read it..but it had a simple writing style...adding details..will make it great.
HR: as the host said, they're funny and interesting, i personally think people will enjoy reading it no matter what.
BTS imagines, scenarios and oneshots by marie0211
rules 5 reader interaction 5 cover 5 description 4 title 5 social message 2 *3 plot 6 *7 grammar vocabulary 16 *17 plot twist attraction 5 *6 emotions character 5 *6 creativity 4 *7 opinion 5 review...it was nice..but adding more emotions will make it great mark 67 *75
HR: Unfortunately i couldn't read all the chapters/oneshots but some of them are really unique and some are kinda basic and cliche so it tends to bring the book to an average level.
Judge: kpopcharmseu
book name: Loving him
Author: Rhiminmin
Title: 5/5
Cover: 4/5
Description: 4/5
Reader's interaction: 2/5
Rules: 5/5
Social message: 1/5
Plot: 4/10
Grammar: 18/20
Plot twists and attraction: 6/10
Emotions and character development: 4/10
Creativity and way of writing: 7/10
Your opinion on the book: 6/10
Review:
Any tips for the author:
The book is a new one, there are only few chapters...since it's a short story and must be ending in like 10-12 chapters at max, i would suggest the author to write longer chapters, at least some 300 to 500 words each since the current ones are way too short, and the story plot doesn't seem any new, author can rather try to make the upcoming chapters a little more engaging and unique.
TOTAL: 66/100
book name: make it right
Author: lollyfluff
Title: 5/5
Cover: 4/5 (work on the font a little)
Description: 3/5
Reader's interaction: 3/5
Rules: 5/5
Social message: 3/5
Plot: 7/10
Grammar: 19/20
Plot twists and attraction: 5.5/10
Emotions and character development: 7/10
Creativity and way of writing: 8/10
Your opinion on the book: 8/10
Review: some oneshots has rather unique set ups, some are kinda cliche. The book overall is a good read.
Any tips for the author: Author can extend the oneshots a little, explain the scenes and the mc's relationship with more details.
TOTAL: 78.5/100
Judge: _things_and_stuff_
Feel you by lovejiminssmile
Rules: 5
Reader interactions: 5
Cover: 4
Description: 5
You have a very good description. It's really emotional and beautiful. It warms my hear in a way.
Title: 5
Message: 5
Plot: 7
Grammar, vocabulary: 13
It was very hard for me to personally point your book. To be honest, I really love these kind of books, when they are short and in a way poetic. Unfortunately at some of the categories I had to lower down the points because the book didn't have those elements, for me to be able to full judge your book, and judge you. So at the categories, I put in of how much I think, but it was really hard. Your story is very good, you should keep going. Expressing yourself this way because it really suits you and I enjoyed it. This is the type of book where it doesn't take you much time to read, but, just leaves such a big imprint.
Plot twists, interactions: 5
Emotions, characters: 6
Creativity: 10
My opinion: 10
Total: 80/100
Shy Bean by koo_kielove
Rules: 5
Reader interactions: 5
Cover: 4
I think that the cover is a little bit empty. Make it a bit more live up, give it a little bit of more personality.
Description: 4
Title: 5
Message: 4
Plot: 7
Your plotting is decent, perhaps a bit more work on making the story line up, connecting the dots, and actually reaching the very peak.
Grammar, vocabulary: 12
I found a bit of grammar mistakes, and typos, but I usually dont look into typos if it's not ever other word. I think you have a good point of view. At this point, it's much more to writing and reading. Practicing your writing and looking into, what suits you the most.
Plot twists, interactions: 6
Emotion, character: 6
Actually, I think you did good enough. You were expressing yourself, and making the connections deeper by every chapter.
Creativity: 7
My opinion: 7
Total: 72/100
Love which was never destined by btsfantasyworld
Rules: 5
Reader interactions: 5
Cover: 5
Personally I liked the theme in the cover. And I think it's beautiful how the light between the color is changing like that small strike goes.
Description: 4
It's simple, but rather too much. I think that you have many great elements to make a better description for your book.
Title: 5
Message: 4
Plot: 8
I think that your plotting is there. Perhaps you should work a bit more to get that connection in the story line, to give a better back story and overall connection, so that we can really feel the plot.
Grammar, vocabulary: 10
I found it very confusing how the POVs were changing, and I had to go back a few times because of how excited I get to read more I actually would get lost. I recommend perhaps slowing down a living that moment through which you're living and going over while writing it.
Plot twist, interactions: 6
I feel like, this is a short story, but, I think you did pull it really well with how short it actually was. I think that you should really try, to make like a another short story, also in the same amount of chapters, but take it slow. Write the whole emotions that you have for your characters, and for your book. Make us fall in love with them.
Emotions, characters: 7
Creativity: 9
My opinion: 8
Total: 76/100
That's all!
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