REVIEW#94
GENRE: FANFICTION,
BY: SHOOTINGSTARS1217
STATUS: ONGOING
RATE: 8/10
CONTAINING: boyxgirl, JUNGKOOKFANFIC, a bit mystery
SUMMARY:
What do you do when you meet a psychopath who wants to kill you and your friends?.You flip him off of course
REVIEW:
first of all, I would like to welcome you to the wattpad community and I do hope you have a great time here in writing! I would also thank your friend who had been kind enough to get the review check and I think you have an amazing best friend for that.
But let's go to the review since I think this is your first book I think you're really up for a challenge in making your story a thriller and semi mystery and semi crack-head. But I can't really judge someone like that because I don't know how long you've been writing and decided to publish your book.
but as for right now, the part of the mystery is very dominant in the story and I'm excited to see how the story will unravel itself as for right now I have somethings I like to point out in the story.
First of all, is that I have noticed that you like to change POV, I think it's good that you can write in a different perspective so everyone could understand how each person is feeling and what they were doing at that time but I suggest when you're going to change POV, you could write a better flow of it, since with the constant change of POV in one chapter it could really make people less interested because the flow of the person reading it was a bit off, so instead of ending a sentence and writing ".... POVs" you could use other words to describe another set.
and a little tip from me, since you want to write a mystery story, I think it's better if you write with one POV as the main one of the story, make sure not to frequently change the POV since you want to make the story a bit mystery. if you're going to write's everyone thoughts I suggest it doesn't pass the thoughts of the main character. since you want to make your readers laugh and interested you have to limit the thoughts so people could guess. if you're writing all of their thoughts the meaning of mystery might not be grasp.
but this is all a small tip and what I find you can improve in since I think the story is still the beginning. Overall it was already a good story and I suggest you keep updating so people will be interested in the story.