I took wayyyy too much timeeee bro, I'm so sorry :(
Cantik ak ? Dia macam tiber tapi takpelah 😌
story by Dilla_star
Okaylah tukan ? Tahu tak betapa susahnya nak cipta tajuk untuk sesuatu cerita. Menarik apa tajuk gituw.
[Cover: 7/10]
Letak all the characters in the cover, mantap. Cantik ♥️
[Description: 8/10]
[Penggunaan bahasa: 6/10]
–ayat awak: Abangnya Jaydan yang melihat adiknya lalu pergi ke arahnya.
–boleh dibaiki: Abangnya, Jaydan yang melihat dirinya terus berjalan ke arahnya.
–ayat awak: memberitahu kepada Rayyan
–boleh dibaiki: memberitahu Rayyan
–ayat awak:
" Mana kau pergi semalam ? " tanya kawannya iaitu Mya.
" Tak pergi mana pun, " balas Mya.
*supposed to be "balas Hanie". small things matter ♥️
–and one more comment..
Rayyan is a vampire right ? And he's 20 years old ?! Biasanya vampire umur beratus or beribu 😂 and they'll still look young cuz they're vampire right ? HAHAHAHA donno ah, up to youlah. Your story not mine lol
[Jalan cerita: 6/10]
To be honest, I'm actually not a big fans of vampire's story except for TWILIGHT. Your storyline ? Can ah. Best apa. It's not that bad but you can fix it to make it better. But it's up to you ♥️ That's your story, not mine.
[Keseluruhan: 68/100]
Alhamdulillah okaylah tu ♥️ You're already good but make it better. Trust yourself, I believe you can. Teruskan menulis, lama-lama nanti kita tak akan ada masalah lagi dah. Even I'm still learning, aku dah 5 tahun dekat wattpad and still make mistakes. It's okay to ask ♥️
p/s: no hurt feelings eh ? I'm just being honest and try to help each other. Kalau terkecil hati, mohon maaf :)