First Impression: very interesting formatting!
I like that this story tries something new and tells the story through dialogue only. It definitely gives insight into the characters and their lives. I also like how each chapter is a short, simple, and sweet part in the whole story. It allows the reader to slowly get glimpses into both Theodore and Jade's life and personality. The witty banter between the two was also adorable to read! That being said, I definitely liked the chapters where it was just Theodore and Jade together better. This is because I got confused on who is who in chapters where Max or another character came in. Lastly, I wanted to mention that Chapter 13 and Chapter 15 are the exact same; I wasn't sure if this was intentional.
Overall, I really like the dialogue concept! It tells the story in short, simple parts.
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