My comments will be bold with parentheses.
Thanks to the person who's hosting the Starkit's Prophecy fic and also the second fic on Tumblr.
Doesn't own warrior cats or this fanfic
ALLIANCES (Pretty sure you mean Allegiance?)
ok so like i said this iks my first story be nice plz (Nah)
btw its set afte rsunset so (Just after or a bit later?)
ThunderClan
Leader: Firestar - ginger tom with a flame-colored pelt
Deputy: Brambleclaw - dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes
Medicine Cat: JayFeather-gray tom
Warriors:
Squirrelflight - dark ginger she-cat with green eyes
Apprentice, Foxpaw (No descriptions?)
Dustpelt - dark brown tabby tom
Sandstorm - pale ginger she-ca
Cloudtail - long-haired white tom
Apprentice DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (Simply just cat? Poor Daisy didn't deserve this. Pretty sure it's Daisy)
Brackenfur - golden brown tabby tom
Sorreltail - tortoiseshell-and-white she-cat with amber eyes
Thornclaw - golden brown tabby tom
Brightheart - white she-cat with ginger patches
Spiderleg - long-limbed black tom with brown underbelly and amber eyes
Whitewing - white she-cat with green eyes
Apprentice, Icepaw (Again, same like Foxpaw)
Birchfall - light brown tabby tom
Graystripe - long-haired gray tom
Berrynose - cream-colored tom
Hazeltail - small gray-and-white she-cat
Mousewhisker - gray-and-white tom
Cinderheart - gray tabby she-cat
Poppyfrost - tortoiseshell she-cat
Honeyfern- light brown tabby she-cat
Lionblaze - golden tabby tom (Here's what annoys me a lot. It is set after Sunset but she never mentions whether it took place after or during The Sight. Therefore Lionblaze, Hollyleaf, and Jayfeather should be kits or paws at this point, And that means Jayfeather would a bit too young to father kits, and that means Starkit wouldn't be born yet. I was always wondering why others never talk about this. I have no idea about other Warriors and paws.)
Hollyleaf - black she-cat
FoxHeart-reddish tabby tom (Who is this)
IceFire-white she cat (Did Firestar become dumb during the naming ceremony?)
ToadRibbit-black—and-white tom (I am losing brain cells from these names)
RoseFlame-dark cream she cat
BriarStorm-dark brown she cat
BumbleFlower-very pale gray tom with black stipes (Very manly name.)
BlossomWind-pale brown she cat iwth a dark stripe along her spine
Apprentices:
Fox DaisyPaw - cream long-furred cat from the horseplace (I guess Thunderclan have two cream furred cat with no gender)
FlamePaw-firecolored she cat with one grnee eye one blue eye (Who's the mentor?)
LakePaw-bright blue gray she cat with blue eyes (Again, Who's the mentor?)
The last 2 r starKits siters (There's only one cat though.)
JazzPaw-red she cat with blue eyes and a black tail (These cats don't know what music is. Also, again with no mentor.)
Queens:
Ferncloud - pale gray (with darker flecks) she-cat with green eyes mother of Dustpelts kits (AKA Kit machine)
Dawnsparkle-bright tortishell she cat with garguntan blue eye's mother of Jayfeathers' ktis, formaly of Shadowclan (Does this mean her eyes cover her entire face?)
(Shouldn't Daisy be here?)
Kits:
StarKit-graysh-blue-and purple she cat with molting orange eyes and a white star on her forhaed (I wonder how much inbreeding is needed to get a cat with purple fur.)
Elders:
Longtail - pale tabby tom with dark black stripes, retired early due to failing sight (Nope. He went blind during Firestar quest when his eyes were scratched by a rabbit. Wonder why no one pointed this out)
Mousefur - small dusky brown she-cat
Weaslepelt-big red tabby he cat with bight yellow eyes (hes Rowanclaw's dad, he came to Thunderclan when Dawn- did0 (Why did he even come.)
LeafPool-brown tabby she cat (If Squirrelflight is still a warrior. that means Leafpool should still be a medicine cat. Plus she got her medicine cat name after she discovered the Moonpool so, she should still be young.)
ShadowClan
Leader: Blackstar - large white tom with huge jet-black paws
Deputy: Russetfur - dark ginger she-cat
Medicine Cat: Littlecloud - very small tabby tom
Apprentice, Flamepaw (ginger tom)
Warriors:
Oakfur - small brown tom
Apprentice, Tigerpaw (dark brown tabby tom)
Rowanclaw - ginger tom
Smokefoot - black tom
Apprentice, Owlpaw (light brown tabby tom)
Ivytail - black, white and tortoiseshell she-cat
Apprentice, Dawnpaw (cream-furred she-cat)
Toadfoot - dark brown tom
Crowfrost - black-and-white tom
Apprentice, Olivepaw (tortoiseshell she-cat)
Kinkfur - tabby she-cat, with long fur that sticks out at all angles
Ratscar - brown tom with long scar across his back
Apprentice, Shrewpaw (gray she-cat with black feet)
Snaketail - dark brown tabby tom with striped tail
Apprentice, Scorchpaw (dark gray tom)
Whitewater - white she-cat with long fur, blind in one eye
Apprentice, Redpaw (mottled brown and ginger tom)
Tawnypelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with green eyes
Flamewind- flame color tabby tom with green eye's (There was never a cat named this)
Tigerclaw-huge dark brown tabby tom with long claw's and amber eys (Wait... Tigerclaw why are you still alive?)
DawnFeather-cream tabby she cat (shes a different cant then the one in tC ok?) (Name is different so you doesn't need to inform the reader)
OlivePaw-bright brown she cat
Queens:
Snowbird - pure white she-cat
Elders:
Cedarheart - dark gray tom
Tallpoppy - long-legged light brown she-cat
WindClan
Leader: Onestar - brown tabby tom
Deputy: Ashfoot - gray she-cat
Medicine Cat: Barkface - short-tailed brown tom
Apprentice, Kestrelpaw (mottled gray tom)
Warriors:
Tornear - tabby tom
Crowfeather - dark gray tom
Owlwhisker - light brown tabby tom
Whitetail - small white she-cat
Nightcloud - black she-cat
Gorsetail - very pale gray-and-white cat with blue eyes
Weaselfur - ginger tom with white paws
Harespring - brown-and-white tom
Leaftail - dark tabby tom, amber eyes
Apprentice, Thistlepaw (long-haired white tom)
Dewspots - spotted gray she-cat
Apprentice, Sedgepaw (light brown tabby she-cat)
Willowclaw - gray she-cat
Apprentice, Swallowpaw (dark gray she-cat)
Antpelt - brown tom with one black ear
Emberfoot - gray tom with two dark paws
Apprentice, Sunpaw (tortoiseshell she-cat with large white mark on her forehead)
Heathertail - light brown tabby she-cat with blue eyes
Breezepelt - black tom with amber eyes
Elders:
Morningflower - very old tortoiseshell queen
Webfoot - dark gray tabby tom
RiverClan
Leader: Leopardstar - unusually spotted golden tabby she-cat
Deputy: Mistyfoot - gray she-cat with blue eyes
Medicine Cat: Mothwing - dappled golden she-cat
Apprentice, Willowshine (gray tabby she-cat)
Warriors:
Blackclaw - smoky-black tom
Voletooth - small brown tabby tom
Apprentice, Minnowpaw (dark gray she-cat)
Reedwhisker - black tom
Mosspelt - tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes
Apprentice, Pebblepaw (mottled gray tom)
Beechfur - light brown tom
Rippletail - dark gray tabby tom
Apprentice, Mallowpaw (light brown tabby tom)
Graymist - pale gray tabby
Dawnflower - pale gray she-cat
Dapplenose - mottled gray she-cat
Pouncetail - ginger-and-white tom
Mintfur - light gray tabby tom
Apprentice, Nettlepaw (dark brown tabby tom)
Otterheart - dark brown she-cat
Apprentice, Sneezepaw (gray-and-white tom)
Pinefur - very short-haired tabby she-cat
Apprentice, Robinpaw (tortoiseshell-and-white tom)
Rainstorm - mottled gray-blue tom
Duskfur - brown tabby she-cat
Apprentice, Copperpaw (dark ginger she-cat)
Queens:
Icewing - white cat with green eyes, mother of Beetlekit, Pricklekit, Petalkit, and Grasskit
Elders:
Heavystep - thickset tabby tom
Swallowtail - dark tabby she-cat
Stonestream - gray tom