Okay, my first rhyming poem in a while :) Hope you like it, please give feedback on what I can improve :)
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His hair floated eerily
Like ghostly weed
In the lake's black water
His spirit was freed
His eyes stared glassily
Like orbs of light
In the lake's black water
His spirit in the moonlight
His skin glowed softly
Like clean parchment
In the lake's black water
His spirit will torment
His hands reached sadly
Like claws on a beast
In the lake's black water
His spirit will feast
His lips called silently
Like a darkened cave
In the lake's black water
His spirit is saved
His heart beat gently
Like a desperate drum
In the lake's black water
His spirit will come
The water lapped calmly
Like caressing lips
The lake's black water
Which his spirit now sips
And his life ended peacefully
Like the closing of songs
In the lake's Black water
His spirit now belongs
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I nearly ended it on the second to last verse, but then I thought of a better ending, and so put that instead :)