Chapter Ten The Recluse [[A CORRECTLY SPELLED SENTENCE?!?!? WHAT IS THIS?!?!]]
"EVERONE FALLOW ME" [[Everyone, huh]] meowled StarPleam as see charred for th3 entranse to eh camp. [[Main entrance, dirtplace and... tree]] Tares stremmed down her face1 she wuss so sad her fahter had deid her leader was gunn. [[So sad]] "FLAMEPAW LAKEPAW DUSTPELT MOM LOINBLAZE FALLOW ME." [[That's not everyone]] She said. "I NEDD A PAROL." [[Another parole. Also, I feel like 'patrol' isn't the best word to gather cats to save your leader. More like 'we have to help Firestar' or 'please, help me find him' or anything pleading or inspirationa]]
The run into the frost their pass working fastly [[Yeah. That happens when you run]]. She wood kill HolyLeaf and TigerSar for what thed don! [[Tigerstar is dead.]]
She batlecried using his nose [[She did a battle cry with her nose. You can't deny that it would be intimidating in real life]] to tar down the evill cats. [[A renovation?]] Her heat burneded! [[I hope it burns to smoldering ashes]]
Sune they had funded them. [[A fundraiser! How delightful!]] They were hidnig bwhind a bolder. [[I bet they weren't very good at hide-and-seek]] "HAHAHAH" LAUGHED [[ALL CAPS]] HOLylesf putting er claw on FiresTarS thort.[[I know that says 'throat', but imagine all the things it could be]] "IVE GOT YOU KNOW!" [[You know?]]
StarGleam gasped. "noooooo Fireheat!" she scemmed "FalmePawgo!" she said. [[Flamingo? Flame mango? Famine go?]]
Flamepaw hurled at HolyLeaf. Hollyleaf laked at her in suprise. [[Get laked, scrub]] "What how could they have fallowd me." [[I wonder]] She dogged at Flamepaw her blue eys fallshig. [[Woof, woof, bark bark]]
"NO FLAMEPAW" whaled LakePaw [[Whales. W H A L E S]] seing her sisters about too die. "I LOVE YOU FALMEPAW." She yowled jumping herself in front of HOlyLeaf. [[Oh the tension]]
HollyLaffs paw cutt into hir throt blood came out LakePaw felt down. [[How graphic]]
"NOOOO!1!11" StarPaw screamed. "FLAMEAPWWW!" [[Because Flamepaw is the one that sacrificed herself and is currently dying, not Lakepaw]] She ran for HoltLeaf but it wass no us. LakPaw was dyeing. [[I wonder why.]] "I lofe you StarGleam." [[Poor Flamepaw]] She wisperd before er blue I's cosed. [[In this entire time, the rest of the cats did absolutely nothing but watch Lakepaw die]]
"NO WAKE UP LAKEPOOL" [[this time, never wake up]] shoited Stargleam-she was so sad and depersed she was cyring! [[Thanks for letting us know author]]
"hahaha" laughed HollyLeaf evil. "u just dunt gedot d o you Im one of teh Tree! [[Mighty tree]] I have pows beyound ur emaginating!" nd then…. She turned in…. A BARE! [[No no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no]]
"Gasped" gasped everyone. It was a bare! [[No no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no no]]
"IM A SHAPSHITTER!" siad Hollylea joyly. [[........ there's water everywhere.... the water I was drinking.... it all came out...]]
"stargleam." Said FalmePaw cryingly. "I nedd to go back 2 the damp. I goat bury laekpaw. Ive neverbeen out of camp before how do you get back!" [[An apprentice before Starpaw doesn't know how to get back to camp because LOGIC]]
"U ju wak to te the est. said StarPaw." [[No one's midly concerned about the BEAR?!?!]]
Thaks said FlamePaw crying she piced up the LakePaw [[Spiced up the Lakepaw]] and putter on her back and run. [[Thanks a lot]]
"nut so fast!" said Holyleaf! "Your not gunna get away that easly!" Wit a rar like an volcano erection [[ I just cleaned up the water only to spray it everywhere again]] she jumped at StarGlaem!
Everone! Gasped! "NOOOO." Yowled STarGleam as sumething lung and sarp pluned into her bk. [[Should be dead]] "YOU CANT GET ME THAT EASLY." [[Who said that? The bear that said it a paragraph ago or the tiny kit-sized warrior that's being stabbed by bear teeth? Oh yeah, she's being attacked by a bear]]
Everyone jumped at the HoBare! [[Pfft]] The bare rared in pane! Starepaw sent her teeth into its for. [[Doubt that would do anything]] It rared. [[Starkit is perfectly fine after being impaled in the back]]
"oak oka" HolyLeafthe bare said. "i no know Your not guna be bettin that esliay." [[You're a bear. She's a kit. She should be beaten like a fly]] Suddenly she was a cat1 then her body dropped her eyes went drka she was on the grund. [[Oh no]] Suddly ther wass howl from the other side of the froste. It was LaFlamePaw! [[Who? They merged? Fusion?]]
"LAKEPAW UR BACK!" SHE SAD [[Which paw?]]
WHT SAID SPARGLAME [[I legit thought that said 'spaghetti']]. Thenshe locked. It was LakePool! She was runnin tord the forest [[running towards the forest would mean Lakepaw/pool is heading in any possible way]] starGleam was so appy. [[Does it not unsettle you that she died?]] Then she sawyer eyes.
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THEY WERE OLLYLEAFS! [[Because that is Warriors]]
the next chatter wil coke soon! [[wtf does that mean]] AND STUP FLAMMING YOU HAETRS. YOU JUST DONT BELVE IN GOOD. [[I believe in decent fanfictions and this is not one of them. It's like claiming you have an Albatross in golf while having a Triple Bogey multiplied by 14,349. Someone do the math]]
[[I've decided for no bold in reacting to author's notes, maybe easier to catch]]
[[Also, I don't think Lionblaze, Dustpelt or... Dawnsparkle *shivers* weren't mentioned once during that fight. I'm too lazy to check]]